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 |  | Waterlily  [13+] Chromatella tells the story of rising from the muck  |
| (5.0)   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM"Anniversary Reviews ~ Summer Break"   My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A waterlily anticipates blooming.  WHAT I LIKED I liked the progression of the poem and how it built anticipation for our waterlily.  STRUCTUREThis is free form poem. MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. DESCRIPTIONSI liked: "In the thaw mud stirs and my heart bobs. to sunlight, " This is a great description that put the reader in the moment. The use of 'heart bobs' stirs emotion, has the reader anticipates what might come next. Well done. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSThe opening engages the reader, and keeps them reading, wanting to find out more. I really liked the reverent expression for nature in this poem, following cycles of life, staring in winter to a summer bloom. The title fits the poem well. Nice, succinct expression. If anything I might check the links and the invalid item as I don't think they're all good more. An Angel Army Review
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You responded to this review 06/17/2025 @ 10:28pm EDT