Hi, oldmonty,

Number 4 review of the 5 poems you wrote last.

I didn't like this poem as much as I loved the others. It has forced rhyme, and it seemed that the younger version of you had been interpreting her words incorrectly. She didn't say she didn't love you, but that she thought you both should wait with the marriage until you came back home from Germany. There is a huge and significant difference.

If you take a look at the poem with the eyes and the knowledge of the 84-year-old poet you are now, I think you can make this a better poem IMHO.

But of course, I am but one reviewer; you must take my words at face value.

Anyway, love that you have the words of a twenty-year-old soldier writing and receiving letters from his girlfriend while in the army. It gives a true historical perspective.

Thanks for sharing and keep on writing.

WakeUpAndLive

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