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 Different Crowns Open in new Window. [13+]
A story about the Third Sorrowful Mystery. . .
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings!

I'm here for I Write 2025.

I really enjoyed this story. It speaks about seeking after peace in a relatable way, set in the real world among young people of today dealing with today's issues, and draws in Christianity to address it in a spiritually satisfying way, rather than presenting some sort of wishy-washy secular attitude.

I would suggest you add an item link at the bottom to show what contest you have written it for. I also noticed a couple of typos... I detest trying to scroll back through an item and find the typos again - I wish I would take note as I'm reading *Laugh* Oh, here's one: where Evelyn says "What does that have to us?" It should be "to do with us." Other than that, nothing which majorly tripped me up.

I'm glad you entered this contest... I need to gather my overheated, summer-slump wits and put something together for it myself. I have plans to write something combining it with "Merit Badge MagicOpen in new Window., which oughta be fun. Good luck to you!

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*



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