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 In Amelo Open in new Window. [ASR]
A tale of the Earth's eighth continent
by Starmic Suebear Author Icon
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


*Reading* THE POEM

The poem was about a fictional continent on Earth that's a little rough around the edges.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I appreciated the world building, which is never easy. I had a good sense of what Amelo was like.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a poem with 4 quatrains a different rythme scheme in each stanza. If anything, my suggestion would be to make the rythme scheme consistent such as AABB or ABAB.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: Where plantations make a country rich," The description is simple and allows for a good visual. The word plantation harkens back to the US Civil War and I thought of something out of Gone with the Wind. It also evokes an uneasy or uncertain emotional response, and implies that Amelo might not be such a great place.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening has a nice flow and invites the reader to keep reading. This is something that is definitely the spark of an idea that can fleshed out.

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