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Door To Door Mayhem  [18+] I am beleaguered by door-to-door people. But I get a lovely present. 300 words  |
| (5.0)| My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.  THE STORYOur narrator gets a lot of door-to-door sales people.  WHAT I LIKEDI enjoyed the light comedic tones and the ending was perfect for the story.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the 1st person by an unnamed narrator. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUEThe dialogue drives the story. The dialogue tags were appropriate. OPENING PARAGRAPHThe opening paragraph put me right in the action, answering the door along with our narrator. Well done. It engaged me as a reader. CHARACTERSOur unnamed narrator who is a generous soul. FLOW & PACINGIt was spot on. There was a solid beginning, middle, and end to his compact vinyette. MECHANICSI did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font. PARTING THOUGHTSThe title fits the story well. The author uses a good economy of words to tell the story, and incorporates the prompt words effortlessly. Good, light-hearted comedic beats. A very entertaining vinyette! An Angel Army Review
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You responded to this review 07/15/2025 @ 2:57pm EDT