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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


*Reading* THE POEM

This poem told the story of emotional brotherhood, traditions, and honor through a military vantage point.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the heartwarming story the poem told. Well done. Very touching.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make the poem easier to read on WDC.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "playing taps on a tarnished and dented bugle, that had traveled the miles with him." The poet uses a good economy of words to not only paint the scene - a bugler playing taps, but words like "tarnished" and "dented" tap into emotion well. There's raw sentiment for what's occurring that tugs on the heartstrings.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening starts with a heartfelt story that readers want to find out what happens. The title is a nice fit for the poem. I enjoyed the reverence for the military and and how the poet touched on the poignant emotions that hearing taps brings out in one.

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