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 Alchemy Open in new Window. [E]
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by Ra M Author Icon
Review of Alchemy  Open in new Window.
Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Ra M Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Alchemy" Open in new Window.. I'm writing this review as part of the 25th Writing.Com festivities. I hope you're taking some time to take part in the activities.

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. At first, I was concerned about your title. Alchemy is not a widely respected word these days, as it was many years in the past. Yet, I did a deep-dive into the meaning of the word and have determined that you used it perfectly.

And, with another word you used, I had to look up "jaggery." I was unfamiliar with that word. Once again, I discovered your expression was spot-on. I suspect that we get too complacent with the use of our own language, failing to seek out alternative expressions to enhance our writing. Kudos to you in this regard.

Honestly, I did have some reservation about the use of your opening statement. I felt its use looked more like a title, than a statement supporting your poetic words. Or, maybe it was to be a section header. Yet, you had no other headers. I personally found it a bit distracting and wondered if it was really necessary. Just a thought.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

I found nothing to note in this section. I believe poetry offers the author the opportunity to display his or her words in a manner apart from punctuation or grammatical norms.

*Star* My Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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