 Noticing Newbies: January 26, 2011 Issue [#4200] |
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This week: Avoid Repeating Words Edited by: Brooke  
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Avoid Repeating Words
Repeating words aka "crutch words" - Just about every writer has a certain word or phrase they lean or rely on a little too much. Crutch words are usually relatively unmemorable. That's why they are hard to catch when proofreading, but your readers will notice them. Haven't you ever been reading a book and realize at the end of a chapter that you've heard the same word half a dozen times and you're starting to get annoyed hearing it? As you know, what is it that eventually happens when readers get irritated? Down goes your book, perhaps innocently enough, to get a drink or a snack and then it's never picked up again. As a rule of thumb, even if the word is unusual or heaven forbid 'hip' or 'cool', and even if you use it differently when you repeat it, just don't. Even if you don't think your readers will notice, they will so don't do it. The same goes for repeats of several words together - a certain phrase may seem just fine, but, restated over and over, will eventually highlight your weakness instead of your strengths. You're not alone either, I read an article recently showing professional author Sheldon Siegel making this same mistake in his popular courtroom thriller, Final Verdict, from a few years back.
"His tone oozes self-righteousness when he says..." page 188
"His voice is barely audible when he says..." page 193
"His tone is unapologetic when he says..." page 199
"Rosie keeps her tone even when she says..." page 200
"His tone is even when he says..." page 205
"I switch to my lawyer voice when I say ..." page 211
"He sounds like Grace when he says..." page 211
Would you like help finding out what words you use most in your writing? I know of a couple ways off the top of my head. The first is very simple. On the top of any of your written Writing.com items, you'll see the following:
Your Item: Edit FS Q | Delete | Spell | Count | HTML | RCS | Reviews | Stats
By clicking count you will see a small window open that will show you not only your word count but which used are used most frequently. This is what the result is for this newsletter.
The second way is a little more visual and dare I say, artsy. The site is called Wordsy and what it does is calculate the words of any document or website you choose and then produce an image that highlights (by size) the words you used most. You can choose to include common words or exclude them and a host of other selection criteria. Here is a (reduced size) image of what the words used in this newsletter produced for me.
Visit Wordle to create your own visual image to see which words you use the most. Have fun!
If you'd like to share your thoughts, please send me a note using the box at the bottom of this newsletter directly under the phrase "Don't Be Shy! Write Into This Newsletter!" 
Until next time, Write and Review on! ~ Brooke
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I received some wonderful feedback to my last newsletter [#4154] "Celebrating the New Year" and I'm proud to share it with you.
From narin 
Very informative
Thank you! I appreciate you. 
From atwhatcost
I think you've stumbled upon the mistake made in failed "resolutions." The difference between resolve and goals. Resolve - "to reach a firm decision." Goal - "the end in which effort is directed." If I resolve to write a book, it gets done. If my goal is set, then I merely know make an effort aimed towards that direction. There are real reasons sometimes we cannot set aside specific amounts of time per day to write. Goals give us room for that. Resolutions demand we catch up.
I think resolutions die so quickly, because they are treated as goals. When we fail, we give room to give up.
You have a good point. Good luck with your goals!
From twon721
Nature is my best friend, I need not plan a year ahead. Another year gone by is not so scary to a child, to an adult each year that passes brings fear and worry. But nature is still my best friend. Tony.
What a great attitude. I don't think it's that way for all adults but I'm sure it is for some. Nature is a wonderful muse. Thanks for writing in!
From Doug Rainbow
I recently saw someone's list of ten ways to make better resolutions. The first item on the list was "Resolve to do tasks, not to create habits." The last item was "Reslove to create habits, not to do tasks."
 Well that's a little conflicting.  Thanks for sharing.
From atreidesmouse
Thanks for featuring my item in your newsletter! It was very interesting to learn about the history of the New Year's celebration and resolutions. I enjoyed this newsletter!
Thank you and I'm really glad you enjoyed it.
From Phoenix
Brooke,
Thank for including the information about the New Year. In our family, we actually celebrate two different beginnings. The American New Year - based on living in the U.S., and the Persian New Year - based on my husband's Persian background. We take both opportunities to spend time with friends and family, creating a lot of great memories.
That's a great idea. What a wonderful way to learn about your spouses heritage and share new traditions. 
Here is some feedback recently received from my November 2010 newsletter [#4097] "The Benefits of Journaling"
From Christine Cassello
I thought this was very good advice and was not aware of the physical benefits of journaling even though I know it is a good mood enhancer. I do disagree with one statement you make at the end, however, "you're writing to someone who won't judge you - yourself." I do judge myself and usually too harshly. I'm working on being more lenient and understanding.
That's an excellent point. I never thought of it that way and I'm sure many of us are our own worst critic. Thanks for writing in and sharing your thoughts.
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