Oct 22 required and bonus

Wednesday, Oct. 22

Required: Outline Revision #3 ▼

The third draft of your outline.

Options:

Using traditional outlining or index cards, fill in some of the gaps and start developing subplots.

The Snowflake Method  : Write a one-paragraph summary of each key character's personal storyline.



Paragraphs of each character’s personal story line..



Emma



However, when the kids attended school and Everett work, she belonged to the world. Emma was a woman that spent her mornings playing bridge with her friends, shopping at the local mall, and everyone knew Emma. She spent Sundays serving at the homeless shelter soup kitchen. She was happy having a life outside of her family. Her evenings belonged to her family. The loss of income, moving to an isolated area, and having no close friends was just too much for her. She hanged herself on the clothes line that she placed her family’s clothes to dry every Friday.



Sarah

         Sarah begins the family line of witches. She finds the coven after being in an abusive home, separated from her husband, and pregnant. She becomes one of the coven’s council members. She delivers her daughter Matilda in a witch’s ritual. He live ends tragically at the hands of her granddaughter.



J.J.

         James Johnson Jr. was Jake’s best friend. His heart went out to young Sarah. Though he was so much older, he fell in love with her. He befriended her when she was in such pain. He thought that he was rescuing her by taking her away and marring her. However, they were found by their fathers. Sarah promises not to see J.J. again in order to stop her brothers from beating him. It is not known if J.J. ever finds out that he was a father.



James

         Though James is only mentioned when Sarah and J.J. has married, he makes a big impact on the story. He is a pastor, and doesn’t believing in mixed couples. He doesn’t want his black son married to a white woman from a bad family.



Willow

         There isn’t much said so far in my thought pattern about Willow’s back story. Thinking about the possibilities, creates a blank slate for the character. I want to believe that she is the high priestess of the coven because she inherited the land from her mother who was a witch who practiced alone in secret. Willow decides to allow others to know what she is. She opens her home land to others who believed the same. One by one women found their way to her. Some were witches who were afraid to practice their craft alone. Others were homeless and found refuge there then decided to follow Willow’s beliefs. She had no idea that one born there would take her life and her coven.



Anna

         Anna is the first to come to live on Willow’s land. Willow taught her about witchcraft, Anna learned from the stories about Willow’s mother, and Anna was taught the craft by Willow for a year to be counted a witch. While learning under Willow, Anna suckled her two month son from the tits of animals. She believed that this would make him have a bond with the animals sharing their powers. As the coven grew, Anna was the first of Willow’s council. She also brought Sarah into the coven. Her son and Sarah’s coven born daughter are untiled as mates by ritual performed by Willow among the birch trees. She is Mary and Mercy’s grandmother. She was out of the coven working in the fields when the coven burned.



Matilda

         Sarah was the first woman to give birth in the coven. Matilda was born, married, and gave birth to her own twin daughters in rituals inside the ash circle among the Birch trees. When her daughters were about three, she and Damion leave the coven following Rev. Dallas and his teaching of Christianity. She results back to casting a spell to protect her daughter Mary from the other daughter Mercy.



Damion

         Damion was two months old when Anna moved in with Willow. When Anna decided to practice witchcraft, Damion was nursed by animals to be to gain their bond with nature. She believed that Damion would have the power to communicate with animals and their power to connect with the Earth as the animals do. Damion is only mentioned in the story as Anna’s son, Matilda’s husband, and in a conversation with his daughters right before they find out about their power. He impregnated five women during the marriage ritual between him and Matilda.



Rev. Dallas

         His name was Christian Rayvon Wright, and his name was irony because he had never been in the state of Texas in his life. He grew up on a farm in the Appalachian Mountains. He has one sister that his parents allowed him to name his sister. He named her after a cow that he helped deliver a child, Bessie. He didn’t pick up the nick name until he was given the cowboy hat. He lives in the church.



Mary

         She is Matilda’s oldest twin. She was born minutes before her sister Mercy. Mary decides to follow religion, but Mercy finds a hunger for her power. She pleads with Mercy not to follow the information trail found in the box from the basement. Mary will not allow witches to live.



Mercy

         Mercy was always the more dominate of the twins. She knew how to get what she wants with her charms. She decides to go back to the coven. There she kills Willow, takes over the coven, and lies to the coven council telling them that Willow gave her the rule of the community.







Outline revision

Outline

of

Generation Witch

GG.          Meet Sarah

This chapter’s scenes are about Sarah. It is based on the conflicts that is going on in her family. Most of the chapter happens in the family’s home. There is another scene where she and J.J. is separated.



5.          We meet Sarah’s family

VII.          Edward becomes a drunk

VIII.          Emma hangs herself

IX.          Lee and Jack once loving brothers are growing up abusing her

6.           Meet J.J

xi.          Sarah and J.J get married

xii.          You meet J.J.’s parents

xiii.          Both families find out and find them the morning after

xiv.          They are beaten and Sarah agrees not to see her husband

xv.          James sends J.J. out of state



HH.          Mistresses Zodiac

First scene is of Sarah being homeless, and she meets Mark. She lives at their house. There she cares for their twin daughters. There is an emotional scene in the children’s bedroom. A later scene is meeting Anna. Last scene of this chapter is finding the coven, and giving birth to a daughter during a ritual.



3.          Sarah is homeless and pregnant

XIII.          She uses local media and library to search for help for her child

XIV.          meets Mark and his wife Carol

XV.          She becomes a live in babysitter for their twins

XVI.          Mark rapes her in the children’s bedroom

XVII.          Sarah leaves Mark and Carol we meet Anna

XVIII.          Anna takes Sarah to the Mistresses Zodiac

II.          Matilda

The scenes are going to happen in the coven and the forest around it. Matilda will be defined as a child and a preteen in this chapter.



xi.          Born in a witch ritual

xii.          Her physical descriptions as a child

xiii.          Anna explains how she nursed her son off animals

xiv.          She visits rituals

xv.          She plays with Damion



JJ.          Matilda’s Power

Matilda learns her craft under the supervision of her mother Rose, Anna, and Willow



ix.          Willow allowed Matilda to attend rituals, participate in them

x.          Anna teaches Matilda simple potion spells

xi.          Sarah works with her daughter on chants

xii.          These three test Matilda to find her placement in the coven



KK.          Damion/Matilda

The scene takes place in the forest. They marry in the ash circle surrounded by birch trees in a ritual performed by Willow. These scenes are graphic-sexy scenes. After the wedding, Damion has to take the virginity of the girls over nineteen over the time of seven nights. The last scene is of the couple moving into their new home.

ix.          Begins by Describing the wedding ceremony

x.          Each mother readies the other mother’s child for the ritual

xi.          The couple consummate their marriage on the alter

xii.          The groom has to take the virginity of the girls over 25 in the coven with in the week wedding ritual



LL.          Matilda’s Twins

This chapter is about Matilda and Damion welcoming their twins in the same circle that Matilda and Damion had conceived them during their wedding night.

vii.          Chapter starts with the couple in the doctor’s office, and holding hands as they find out about having twins

viii.          Paragraph about the babies’ relationship in the womb

ix.          The babies as toddlers and young children



MM.          Twins Dedication

First scene: The twins are three when Matilda and Damion meet Reverend Dallas at a farmer’s market. Another scene where the family has decided to visit the church

v.          Getting the kids ready for church…

vi.          Thinking about combining this chapter with the chapter above



NN.          Reverend Dallas

First scene: The twins are three when Matilda and Damion meet Reverend Dallas at a farmer’s market. Another scene where the family has decided to visit the church….. Getting the kids ready for church…

ix.          His real name is Christian Rayvon Wright met Matilda and her family at the fruit market.

1.          He has long hair pulled back in a ponytail.

2.          goatee beard

3.          muscular arms with tattoos on both above the elbow

a.          right arm picture of praying hands “Jesus Saves”

b.          left arm, there was a picture of the crucifixion with a date. The date was the date that he was re-born a Christian.

x.          ten gallon hat with a large Eagle feather in the band

xi.          describes breakfast and challenges of getting toddlers ready for church

xii.          Twins behavior in their first Sunday school class

1.          Questions about bible about their lessons at home

2.          Church gave girls a Book of Bible Stories



OO.          Christianity

iii.          This scene will be of the battle in Matilda’s heart between her loyalties of witchcraft in which she was raised and the God she has grown to love.

1.          looks like

2.          what the family felt

3.          Matilda giving her life to the lord



PP.          Family Leave

First scene is of Matilda packing to leave the coven. She is packing the children’s things when she has to explain her change of religion to Willow and Sarah.

v.          Conversation with Willow and Sarah around her table

vi.          The tearful good byes between the women and children

1.          Anna has a hidden anger about her grandchildren leaving the coven

a.          Anna gives Mercy a talisman

i.          The wooden doll has a spell to bring her back to the coven one day

vii.          The trip to back to New York to new church

         



QQ.          Twins go to School

Scenes Matilda leaving the girls at their first day at Christian Fellowship Pre-school. This will be a memory, and then the will end with Matilda and Damion sitting at their elementary graduation.

vii.          The girls have an easy time separating from Matilda

viii.          Matilda didn’t have such an easy time

1.          Matilda sat in her car watching them enter school with tears in her eyes

ix.          The girls are dressed different in shinny dresses

1.          Mary in pink silk

a.          Hair back in a braid

2.          Mercy black “fake” leather

a.          Hair hanging in ringlets







RR.          Twins Learn the Past

The first scene will be of Mercy finding a letter from Sarah to Matilda in an old box while playing in the basement. This scene will describe the basement, contents of the box, and a book of Matilda’s young spells.

vii.          Mercy reads the yellowing paper

1.          Sarah was explaining to Matilda how to get a birth certificate since she was born in the coven with no record

viii.          Mercy takes the letters to Mary

1.          Mary wants to talk to Matilda, but Mercy doesn’t

ix.          We find out what the basement looks like

1.          Pool table

2.          Sectional table

3.          Fire place

4.          A room used for storage

a.          This is the where the box is found

i.          A cigar box tied with a black and gold silk ribbon

b.          The book was in the bottom of the cigar box

i.          A leather journal with hand written poetry at first glance (spells)



SS.          Mercy Goes Away

v.          Mercy pleads with her sister to go in look for their past at the coven

vi.          Mercy cannot get Mary to search for the coven with her

a.          Instead Mary turns to Rev Dallas



TT.          Mercy and Willow

Scene is of Mercy serving Willow dinner after being accepting into the coven for over three weeks.  Another scene is of Willow dying, and Mercy hiding the body.

vii.          When Mercy comes to the coven

1.          Sarah takes her into her house

2.          Willow teaches her how to use powers, potions, spells

viii.          In exchange for her teaching Mercy cooks and cleans for Willow

1.          Mercy brings Willow her dinner and a glass of berry wine each evening before going home to Sarah

2.          Mercy is placing a poison potion from Willow’s own cabinet into her drink every evening.

ix.          Willow begins to run a high fever

1.          Mercy cares for her while keeping the illness of Willow secret

2.          Mercy is telling that Willow is getting ready to go for a journey to help start another coven

a.          When Willow dies, Mercy tells the coven that Willow has ordained her to be the Mistresses Mother



UU.          Mary Pleas

Scene: Mary visits her sister at the coven. There she finds that Willow’s role in the coven was now Mercy. She begs Mercy to give up witchery, and come home to the church with her. Another scene is of Mercy trying to cast a spell on her sister. Scene: Mary visits her pastor for advice.

ix.          Mary finds Mercy ruling the coven in Willow’s place

x.          Conversation between the sisters

xi.          Mercy get angry and sends Mary away harshly

1.          Sarah asks Mary not to come back for fear Mercy would kill Mary

2.          Mary tries to get Sarah to repent and go to church with her

xii.          In this chapter we have a lot of scriptures given against witches given to Mary from Dallas



VV.          The Final Fire

First scene is of Mary in her grandmother’s room. The last scene is of the after math of the burning of the coven. I am not sure what direction and twist that I will add here. I am sure that it will make some changes.          

vii.          Description of Sarah’s room

viii.          A better description of the coven

1.          The houses

2.          The moon

3.          shadows

ix.          Some trap for Mercy so that Mary can confine her in the burning coven          

I may have Matilda to realize what is happening and for fear of Mary’s life be casting a protection spell behind the scenes at her house