JustAdam40's (adamscarsdale) Reviews

Wow. I'm really at a loss for words. I wish I were you're daddy. No child should feel this way. Trust me, I can relate. My father left me when I was 9 months old, and I didn't meet him until I was 36, after I suffered a heart attack. I'm 40 now, and I am over him. He had his chance to include me in his life. It's his loss, not mine. It's not our fault who are parents are, and I hope you value you're life more now. The poem is tight, and scary at the same time. I've never read anything more real. Take care, and if you ever feel down... hit me up. I'm a good listener, and I understand you're pain. 10 stars... in my book.

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Review of Monster

Review by JustAdam40

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Great poem. Reminds me of my own style. Check out my poem called "Imagine", if you're feeling up to it.

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Review of Crash Scene Witness

Review by JustAdam40

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Great poem, however I didn't really like the repeating of the same sentence, in each verse. It's only my opinion from a readers POV. Maybe it's a style I'm just not used to. Overall, great job, keep it up.

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#3957445

Review of The Sewer

Review by JustAdam40

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Creepy, suspenseful. I like it. Flash fiction is fun. It's quick and right to the point, and in the end, you want more.

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#3957442

Review of Poke

Review by JustAdam40

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Great story. I would just suggest spacing each line. It just makes it easier to read. Great job.

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#3957441

Review of Fire Frogs

Review by JustAdam40

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

I like it. I am not experienced with free verse poetry. Could you send me an e-mail, explaining how to write free verse? Thanks, Adam S.

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#3957220

Review of The Ogre and the Sprite: Poetry Snippets

Review by JustAdam40

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

I really like it-- love the descriptions

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#3956341

Review of I want to express myself

Review by JustAdam40

Rated: E

| (2.5)

Not bad. You might wanna add to it, and explain more. Each line seems like a different subject. I'm not really understanding what your expressing. Keep writing....