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Review of The Land Of Ons  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Sum1's having an anniversary soon... This is just tooooooooooo cute! You made me laugh!
Happy anniversary My Sum1
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Mantis,


I'm honored to read and review Merry Capitulations for Sensuous Moments.

Title:Very witty title that hints to scenes to come.

Description:You have indeed created "Saucy holiday cheer for the final prompt" of 2015. I do hope your description is enough of a tease to pull readers into your port for a visit.

Contents:Your story is so filled with tongue in cheek humor that it exceeds my expectations with the use of the prompt. I love the way your characters, even Bertha, fill in the story.

Your story is light heartedly presented. In the spirit of the season, you've captured the holiday and song with a sensuous twist that is subtle but still present.

Thumbs up:The description of Lars, the man, had me chuckling. I loved the humor used within your story.

Conventions:No noticeable errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.



Amay

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Review of An Ordinary Stone  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi,

I'm honored to read and review "An Ordinary Stone"

Title: Your title works well with the work that you've posted.

Description:Your description gives a great hint about what's to come. It gives a little information and a tease to peak your interest.

Contents:This is 'part' of a larger work. You've created a world, and started to reveal what's to come. Hera's character seems well developed. The reader learns of her quest to learn from Nridi. So far in the story, the readers will see her as a friend and mentor to Hera.

A minor character so far, is Drosvu. As a suitor, you can tell he's very immature and high on himself. At this point, his character is defined, but not developed fully. I'm sure he'll have a larger role further into the story.

Questions arise, but I know you can't give more information out at this point in time. I do feel like you've created a solid beginning to your story.

Thumbs up:

Conventions:I would suggest you go back an proof read your draft. One suggestion a brilliant teacher taught me, go backwards. Start at the end and read each sentence from the bottom up. It sounds weird, but our mind reads what we think we've written. If your looking for grammatical errors, starting from the bottom does focus your mind more than reading from the beginning.

woollen cloak- woolen

“Yes yes lady.” (Yes, yes, lady.)

“right-e-oh then.” (Capital R)

the inhabitance (Inhabitants)

lead (led)

rope ladder hung down

the cold wet slim (slime) on her feet.

“Just enjoy your tea.” Said the old woman as she got to work ladling fish stew into two bowls. This isn't a sentence.She waved he hand over one and it began to stem. typo- her hand.... steam

state contentless awareness content - contentless would be more like agitated

than forteen years old- fourteen

what she thought, was a pretty face- no comma needed

emerald-blue robes embroiled - emerald- blue - Emerald is a green, were the robes green and blue? embroidered

There are a few more rough patches.I'm sure once you sit down and proof read again, you'll catch them all


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Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay



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Rated: E | (5.0)
Simply marvelous.
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Review of Headache: A Haiku  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm honestly not sure how I managed to end up here, but I'm glad I clicked on something and found your Haiku. I love Haiku's they're one of the first poetry forms I would teach my students.

Advil is a wonderful thing! It really does wonders for a headache. However, when I read the last line, I thought you wanted the Advil to go away. I probably would have said... Advil, ah... relief!

Thanks for sharing

amay
2012 winter scene
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Such beauty coming from a place of such heart ache. You've captured a period that most people don't understand. They can't understand until they've felt the pain of hearing that your child has cancer. They can't imagine the bargaining that goes on in your mind.

I'll never forget the day they told me my son had cancer, January 6, 1990. The years that followed. We were lucky. So many are not.

Thank you so much. You've touched my heart.

Katrina
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Review of The Snowy Silence  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Elizabeth,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "The Snowy Silence"

Title:I love your title, there is a lonely silence during the snowfall.

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description works well with your piece.

Contents:Your poem conjures up images that one usually doesn't associate with snowfall. The usual fare is about the beauty, lightness, etc., while you've taken a darker course. Very creative!

Your imagery is quite delightful. It is dark and oh so sinister in feeling.

Thumbs up:I love the twist on an ordinary event into something totally different from the norm.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Sleeping Beauty  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Asha,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "Sleeping Beauty"

Title:interesting choice for a title. It led me in one direction and your poem took me in another. Nice twist.

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description is your first impression. This is where you want to entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work,I think you've made a good first impression.

Contents:Your poem will speak to a lot of people in a lot of different situations. From the lover that's really more of a leach that a caring soul mate, to a child whose the sole caretaker for a beloved parent.

There are times when there's nothing left to give. You have no choice but to continue on, but the joy of life, of living has evaporated to the point you feel like nothing but a shell of the person you once were.

You've captured that plight well. I've lived that life for quite a while, and will continue to put one foot in front of the other and muddle on.

Thumbs up:Your poem probably wasn't written for a person in my situation, but the 'shoe fits' and you've done the situation justice.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors in conventions.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of A Soldier's Faith  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Mike,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "A Solider's Faith"

Title:Your title is perfect for your poem.

Description:Your description gives the reader a hint as to what your poem is going to be about. You've opened the door and welcomed the readership of WDC into your port to enjoy your work.

Contents:Your poem has touched me. As I was reading, your words created images in my mind's eye. The smoke, the Grim Reaper collecting souls, life and death embattled in a moment of time.

I cannot imagine what it would be like. I only know that I'm glad that there are people that give of themselves to make this world a safer place. There have been wars forever and it doesn't look like the human race is any closer to finding peace.

Thumbs up:I loved your imagery. It was really impressive.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors. If you haven't thought about entering this into
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, I would suggest that you do.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Come Play with Me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi KittyKat,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "Come Play With Me"

Title:Your title fits well with your poem.

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description is a good first impression.

Contents:Your poem is short and sweet, kind of like most of childhood itself. Way too short and hopefully filled with wonderful memories. I love the repetition, I would suggest putting in commas to show the reader where to pause... they naturally occur when you use my friend in each line.

Thumbs up:You've written a very enjoyable poem about childhood.

Conventions:I would add commas after friend in each line.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Adielz,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "My Cat's Pink Face"

Title:What an interesting title!

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description is a good first impression.

Contents: I can easily see this as a child's early reader, and I think it would make a good series with more misadventures of said cat.

Think about your audience, if it's an early reader, you have to watch your vocabulary choices. If it's a read aloud, you need more rhyme and meter to capture the child's imagination.

Your writing does conjure up images that will work wonderfully with your text.

Thumbs up:Good luck with this series.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors in conventions.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi EllisRosser,


I'm honored to read and review "A Little Perspective".

Title:Your title gives little indication to what your poem is really about.

Description:A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description is your first impression. This is where you entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work, I think you've made a good first impression.

Contents:The first time I read through your poem, I thought, Man, this is really depressing.So I went back, and started pouring through old memories. Our Pastor Jack Roe grew up in the depression. His parents didn't have anything. Christmas was so important to Jack as an adult, but he never forgot the Christmas that wouldn't have been if it hadn't been for the Salvation Army. Their little paper sack, with and orange, apple and a piece of penny candy was all that he received that year.

Your piece brought back memories of a childhood that wasn't too different. He didn't know if they would make it or not. Things haven't changed much, after all.

Thumbs up:Good Luck in the contest.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors. Some of the lines seem a bit contrived:So imagine my disdain when I received a pear,
oh boy did I let out a little prayer, Oh Boy? prayer? seems to me he'd be letting folks know of his disappointment

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

I hope your holidays are merry and bright.

Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ewright,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "A Matter of Degrees"

Title:

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description is your first impression. This is where you want to entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work, I think you've given a tease in conjunction with your title, makes a good first impression.

Contents:Your poem flows so smoothly. I loved your use of metaphor and how you kept it consistent through out. It brings back memories for me, so it touched a special place in my heart.

Thumbs up:This it the time of year for reflection, and I wonder how many times we miss opportunities to make contact with someone else when we're so wrapped up in our own sorrows.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors. I don't have any suggestions that will make your poem stronger.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of The Lily  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Rhian Folly,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "The Lily"

Title:Poems don't have to be underlined. With a two word title, both words should be capitalized.

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description is your first impression. Many readers will see misspelled words, poor grammar, etc. in a description and pass right on over your piece. This is where you want to entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work, make it a good first impression.

Contents:As I read your poem, it feels like a stream of consciousness. Your metaphor is consistently used through out. You've used a lot of visual descriptions throughout the piece.

Conventions:Line 5 its

Be careful of using similar words close together.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Lionel,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "Easy Come, Easy Go (Dec29 Daily Flash)

Title: I love flash challenges, so you drew me in with that.

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description is your first impression. Many readers will see misspelled words, poor grammar, etc. in a description and pass right on over your piece. This is where you want to entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work, I think you've made a good first impression.

Contents:In a short number of words you've created a world for your main character. You've given him a foe. There's a sense of desperation created as well. The kicker... for the love of coffee. What more is there to live for?

Thumbs up:Excellent twist! I hope it did well in the competition.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors in conventions. Have you every thought about expanding your piece?

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Your Colors  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Snowfie,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "Your Colors"

Title:When I read the title, my thoughts went to auras, so I chose this piece to read.

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description is your first impression. This is where you entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work, make it a good first impression.

Contents:Just so you know, I have a friend that sees people's auras. She's a cool lady. It's funny, she says when she looks at me, there's always yellow and red popping around my head, and she wishes she'd listened more to her Granny, because she wants to know what it means. I told her it meant I had really bad allergies all year round. She laughed.

Anyway, you've chosen an interesting metaphor. While my knowledge of auras is far from complete, the colors you've chosen are interesting in and of themselves. If we could only choose what colors our auras were, I think I'd go with the calmness of the blues (instead of my popping yellow and red).

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors in conventions.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Silverdusteddreams,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "What Would Happen?"

Title:The title drew me in.

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. You description is your first impression. This is where people decide if they even want to bother. This is where you entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work, I think you've made a good first impression.

Contents:You've written a piece which demonstrates your passion,but it tends to get lost being overly romantic. There are places where the flow feels forced, and the wording contrived.

Would flowers spray scent? Would leaves reflect green? flowers don't spray. They produce scent, they emit scent... When I think of spraying and scent- my brain goes right for SKUNKS

This is awkward to read- If it weren't for you, darling, stars, would there have been? Better: If it weren't for you darling, would there be stars above? or stars twinkling in the night?

Thumbs up:

Conventions:When you load your piece, you can change the font size. It would help old souls like me (those with bad eyes) if you would enlarge the font a tad bit.

Some of your lines are really awkward to read. I would suggest going back and reading each set of lines aloud, with the same passion you wrote them with. You might see ways to improve the flow.

Another thing to consider is using the same word too closely together.
Would a gem sparkle its sparkle- use the thesaurus to figure out a different word for one of the sparkles. They're too close together.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of The Steps  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Blue Moon,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "The Steps"

Title:I love the title and picture you put with it. It called to me.

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description is your first impression. This is where you entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work, I think you've made a good first impression.

Contents:You've written a powerful piece that moved this reader's heart. I felt for the little girl (or any child in that position). It broke my heart for her. The thoughts of a child's hope and trust being dashed really brings out the protector in me.
Then your last stanza brings in the other side. Instead of my 'how could he' attitude that I was building up, I changed to - how horrible, knowing what you've left behind.

Thumbs up:You've moved me.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors,but there are places where the pacing could be tweaked to make the flow better.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Laria  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi lvyn,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "Laria"

Title:Interesting title, it fits with your poem.

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. You description is your first impression. This is where you entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work,I personally think you've made a good first impression.

Contents:Laria sounds like a place everyone should strive to go to. A place where life is valued, where the humanity has grown beyond its pettiness. These days, with police being assassinated, with race relations being stoked into more hatred and group mentality seems to lead people more than thinking with their own brains to see how stupid most of this stuff really is, Laria sounds wonderful!

You've imagined a place where the mundane of our lives is removed, where the peace, beauty and joy of living is present. The thing is, we have the power to make where we are, like this. Only we let the rabble rousers take over, bringing in the conflict. We don't stand up, and say enough. All life is important. All blood is red. All mothers mourn when their children make stupid mistakes.

Thumbs up:Thank you for offering a place where peace and love reign.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors. I'm not sure that I could offer any suggestions that would make your poem stronger.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi QueenOwl,


I'm honored to read and review for the Happy Holidays Power Review Weekend.

Title:Your title pulled me in. Just thinking about all of the 'published books' that I can find words misspelled, or homonyms used incorrectly tempted me.

Description:A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description is a good first impression.

Contents:First, I'm sorry for your loss. Second, I totally understand your mortification! Oh my, it makes you wonder how many people caught it at the service.
You've related a moment in time, that I'm sure you'd rather forget. I keep my dictionary handy,and I use Dictionary.com quite often, but sometimes, it's just more trouble than it's worth.
In my trade, you've learned a lesson through a natural consequence. I'm sure you'll be doing your own spell checking from now on.

Thumbs up:To Lessons Learned

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors that detracted from your story.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

I hope your holidays are merry and bright.

Amay

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Review of Choices  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Hi Cheri Annemos,


I'm honored to read and review "Choices" for the Happy Holidays Power Review Weekend.

Title:Your title called to me. I just read a poem on love, so you can sort of see where my mind is right now.

Description:A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. Your description lets the reader know that this was a contest piece, and it has been revised. It also lets the reader know that within 100 words you have to 'relate a story'. Now that's a hard contest!

Contents:You've spent time building your scene and atmosphere. The visual and emotional are well developed. I love how you zipped that twist right at the end. You can almost see the young person holding the phone cord and twisting it around as she calls her mom. You can feel her anguish. With the little bit of dialogue, you can feel a sense of hope start to build.

Thumbs up:I love how you captured a moment in time, explored it and made me feel a part of the scene.

Conventions:I didn't see any errors, but...holy cow, I'd love to know what happens next!

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

I hope your holidays are merry and bright.

Amay

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Review of A new path  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Rayyna,


I'm honored to read and review "A New Path" for the Happy Holidays Power Review Weekend.

Title:I like the title.

Description:A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. You description is your first impression. I think you've made a good first impression.

Contents:It amazes me when I read poetry that makes my heart sing. Simple words, put together with a masterful touch creates such a sense of wonder.

Your last verse is a perfect message for all who have walked a challenging path. It doesn't even have to be about interpersonal relationships, it could just as easily be about challenges in work or family.

Thumbs up:I love how when I read your poem, the flow just seemed to pick up speed as I read. It had a natural feel, not contrived.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

I hope your holidays are merry and bright.

Amay

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Review of Angel  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Kitt,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "Angel"

Title:"Angel"

Description: You've created a very appropriate description.

Contents:When things are fresh is really the best time to capture them. It amazes me how I can have a line or idea at the ready and lose it just as quick. I'm getting old!
You've created something that will mean more to you than anyone else, because your life was touched by this person and her presence will always be a part of you.

Thumbs up:You've honored one that you obviously cared deeply about and I am truly sorry for your loss.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Time is Near  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Aspen,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "Time is Near"

Title:Interesting title, it piqued my interest.

Description: You've created a description that should draw people into your port to read this poem. Congratulations on getting it published.

Contents:I started reading your poem, knowing the purpose from your description, but it struck me as I read. He could have been talking about any school teacher... feeling trapped by the system and Common Core, not being allowed to do what is right by the children, our charges. I'm not sure why my brain went there, but the metaphor worked for me.

Thumbs up:Wonderful words and flow. Congratulations again on being published.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Roots or Freedom  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Ceradia,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I'm honored to read and review "Roots or Freedom"

Title:Your title started this journey. It really struck a chord with me this morning.

Description: A long time ago, I read a news letter here on WDC. One piece of advice I picked up from it was the importance of making a good first impression. You description is your first impression. This is where you entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work, you have made it a good first impression.

Contents:This poem resonates with me. My mom has reached a point in her life where her daily mantra is "Well, I'm going to die tomorrow." She's a long ways from death's door, but her willingness to live is growing daily.
You've captured the essence of that spirit, I'm here on earth, but I'm ready to fly. Ready to move on to the next plain.

Thumbs up:Excellent work! It's just beautiful.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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