This was a very quick, easy madlib. Your grammer was off a bit (A lot of capitals were put in lower case, actually I think almost all capitals were put into lowercase). I thought you'd like to see my results so I decided to review this.
Aimee
You, Aimee are sitting in your plastic container. you can't stop thinking about swiming. you wish you could swim and swim and swim all day long. suddenly, you start to swim with your dance. You feel quick. REALLY quick. so you decide to swim some more.
You swim out of your plastic container, showing yourself to the world. the more that you swim, the better you feel. your neighbor, Meghan, stares at you for a while. then he/she starts to swim as well. he/she looks hilarious.
Soon, the police appear. They watch you swim for a while. Suddenly, they all take out their Toronto and run away swiming. You continue to swim for a while longer, and soon, news reporters start flocking, wondering how you can swim for so long. You are broadcasted worldwide, known as "The swiming Man/Woman". Everyone watches, and soon, the whole world is swiming with you.
President George W. Bush walks up to you and asks you, "Why are you so lime green. You need to get a pool. Stop swiming and go away." You don't want to stop swiming, so you challenge him to a swiming contest. Bush decides to accept. You both start swiming with all of your might. A crowd starts cheering out, "Go Aimee!" "Go Bush!" "Go Aimee!".You are both sweating with effort as you try to outswim the other. Eventually, you win. you smile at Bush and say, "It's all in the arm!"
askpaddy,
I'v never been big on poetry but I find this poem to be rather intresting, the concept of lottery tickets and the winning and losing is beautifully descriped. I thought there could have been a little more detail but other than that, good job.
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Aimee
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ragefire,
This would definately be an unpleasent situation to wake up to. It was an original story and I found it intresting. it was also a short, quick read which was what I was looking for. I thought that there was just the right amount of detail but in the beginning I was a little confused in the beginning but the confussion faded later on.
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Aimee
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Kelsey,
Interesting story, The beginning of this writing was interesting and descriptive. The way you wrote about how you failed the driving test and how you studied for it was pure genious (well in my point of view). Reading it, was like feeling what you were feeling except I didn't have the weight of having to pass or fail on my shoulders. I have a question though. Why is this called Backseat Driver, does that have to do with you getting rides off of your friends?
Aimee
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Kat,
I agree with you on the Monday morning thing. This story reflects what many people feel Monday mornings and what some people feel every morning. You put people's thoughts into words and made it into a great story. I've never read a story based on waking up in the morning but I enjoyed reading yours. Good job on your third place finish.
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Aimee
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I have to say that I really enjoyed reading this poem and hope to read many more like it. I especially enjoyed stanza number three. I don't write poetry and I'm not exactly sure how to review it but...well I'm going to try. You're poem was well-written, detailed yet not over-detailed and it was a good length. I hope to read more of this writing.
Aimee
Judity,
This is an intresting subject to write a poem about. I honestly have never read a poem like this before but I found it refreshing from all the long poems that I always end up reading. I can't write poetry so I admire people who can (and trust me, you can write poetry a lot better than me) and I hope you keep writing it. I can't really review poetry because I don't know that much about it so I'm just going to say that I liked it.
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Aimee
Judity,
I've read stories when the main plot was something like this but the rest of your story was completely original. The whole concept was intresting and intriguing. At first I thought the whole sotry would have been sad and depressing with the main character have brain tumor but it turned into a quick, light read that I definately needed after reading a few depressing poems. I personally thought the short story could have a few more details, especially throughout the middle where the "side effects" are being discovered. I'm going to stop writing now because I've rambled on long enough.
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Aimee
Judity,
I have to say, that with all that description, now I have a craving for chocolate...even though I don't enjoy it that much. You're attention to detail shines in this piece making it seem like it was almost real (3D). The beginning paragraph though (mostly the first sentence) could have had a little bit more to it. I overall enjoyed reading this and I hope to read more.
Aimee
I have to say that I enjoyed reading this letter from you to yourself. The way you wrote the letter as if you were two people made it 1)easier to read and 2)more enjoyable (if that makes any sense). I didn't see any grammatical or spelling errors and since you can't really rate down someone letter to themselves I'm giving you a 5 on this. You have some really great ideas/goals for 2008 and I hope you complete most of them.
I've always wanted to know where everyone is from and what time it is in that country and compare it to my own (Canada). I'm always asking people on chat what time it is where they are. I really like your poll question and hope you come up with some more intresting ones.
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Ames
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