This connects with our senses to hear, feel and taste of nature. You have put a fresh spin on "dancing" in the rain. You worked your words very well creating a picture that I could see and almost smell the rain. Good work, keep writing I look forward to reading more.
This is a gentle and enjoyable read. I enjoy words that lift me up above this earth. I was carried along with pleasure and the last was my favorite. It was a wonderful ending. Keep writing, this is very good.
I enjoyed the style of this write. Indeed the questions seem to be statements. As the picture you create unfolds I am encouraged and though separation is sad, your words are lifted with hope. This was very easy to read and I just like the way it made me feel. Thank you for sharing it. Write on!
It is the little things that are the big things in life. I enjoyed reading this uplifting write applauding a most desired experience for all of us. I felt the satisfaction of a sigh in your words and they have left me with a smile. You delivered a sweet message in a simple and understandable manner. Keep on writing! ~Angel~
Very vivid the images created by your words stirred the all too familiar emotions within. The short bold statements seemed to take command and lead the reader down the path toward fear, unable to resist. Fear holds great power because "horror freezes the soul" and for me that means what is feared can very easily (and has been) reality.
I enjoy your style and felt the energy of your words as they captured my attention. This is a powerful write, delivered in a easy to read manner and I look forward to reading more. Write on! ~Angel~
I was drawn into the "odd place" and found myself wanting to hear more. Though you have used few words, this has depth, and the picture it creates for me was an emotional one. I look forward to reading more of your words. Thank you, and please keep writing.
This is very well written. It touched my heart with sadness especially because I know what you speak of happens in reality, not just in poems. You have told a story with such a powerful message using few words. Very will done. Thank you and please keep writing. Angels Mom
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I enjoyed this anti-love poem. You expressed many emotions with your words, and expressed them very well. I felt like I was on a roller coaster ride with thought and feelings going up only to come crashing down again. The picture you created was one I can relate to. Love and hate are so close, it is hard to separate the two and you have done a good job in showing how they do that. Thank you and please keep writing.
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I enjoyed this. I felt the disappointment of a friend that did not stand the test of true friendship. You expressed the feeling of betrayal with few words. Thank you and please keep writing.
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This is a touching poem. I felt the sadness of an entire family missing one they loved. You expressed this well. Please keep writing.
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I really enjoyed this writing. It is hard to be a teen! I appreciate the message that sometimes people make it even harder than it has to be for a young person. I know I wouldn't want to do it over again. You have expressed the confusion and sometimes pain of trying to grow up in an unfair world very well. Thank you for your words and please keep writing.
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I feel the beauty of our written words is different for each of us. What I am thinking or feeling when I write words are not necessarily what someone will think or feel when they read them.
The feelings I am left with from reading "Three Doors.":
The feeling of wandering in my soul and searching for a place to rest is the picture your words create inside me. I also felt a sense of choice indicated by different things behind each door. Many times I have wanted to wander where I can not yet go. If we are still here on this earth, we have a few more things to do.
This is just my feelings and thoughts on your well written words.
Thank you for sharing this and please keep writing.
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What beautiful words! You have written a strong message of encouragement with few words. If we all could/would live by the wisdom you have expressed in these few words, what a more loving and beautiful place our world would be!
A smile is such a simple thing to give and can be the light, sometimes the only light a person may receive that day. It is amazing what God can do with such a small amount of faith if we but give it to him.
Thank you so much for these words and please keep writing.
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Summary: I liked this.
The flow was a little hard in places and it would be good to use spell check.
I have learned in my short time here that it is very important to edit, and then edit again.
(I can just see my mentor Francie smile, and sigh because I really did listen.)
I really liked the message of this.
The description of hell as riping at flesh and the pain of that will be nothing compared to the separation from love. I think you are so right, that is what hell will be.
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I liked this and the statement it made of expectations.
We too often will "settle" when only the best should do.
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How often our hearts desire is standing right in front of us.
Our dreams, our love there, we just have to open our eyes.
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Creative look at something so simple with so much power. Thanks for the smile.
At work I carry an extra in my pocket in case someone runs out.
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Summary: Oh how well I related to this! I have always been the one everyone told their problems to and I would be needing to express my pain but didn't. I kept it inside and listened to them. They never knew how I felt. Mommy's try to reassure their children everything is alright, because they need us to be. Even my grown children want to hear I am alright. A day spent venting! Oh what a day that could be. Thank you for sharing this, I enjoyed it and understand this type of frustration. Please keep writing.
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I enjoyed reading this. Letting go is one of the hardest things to do. This touches on so many emotions and unconditional love is the impression I am left with. I especially appreciated your words on looking back on the good things with this person and wishing for them goodness in their path and future. The many blessings given and the love this speaks of left me with a bittersweet feeling. This is very well written, expressive and I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing it.
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To say this held my attention from beginning to end is an understatement. I was captivated by your words.
This well known story is one of mystery, at least it always has been to me. It is also one I have avoided giving it as little thought as possible and still know it is there.
The thoughts of Abraham wanting to tell his son to run and the description of his struggle spoke to my heart of the inner turmoil not only for Abraham but for us today. It is not always easy to follow and do what you believe in your heart God wants of you.
Your words speak of an obedience to God that can only be obtained by complete trust in Him.
Thank you for writing and sharing these words. I appreciate your thinking in this and the way you presented it.
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It was hard to read the raw truth of your well written words. This speaks of the reality of life, of humans and the capability some have of this most utterly malevolent behavior.
This reaches out to everyone an awareness of our responsibilities to protect. To not shut our eyes to an ugly truth but to stand and address it for what it is.
The truth of this is hard to read, but it is the reality that makes it so. You have vividly described a horror but oh-to-real aspect of society.
You have shown by your words that each little soul in precious in God's eyes. Thank you so much for sharing this.
I rate this on the content of your words and the powerful message you have so well stated.
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You have captured the core of many family secrets and pain. The picture you have painted in Photographs is one that makes it easy to relate to.
This takes me back with pictures flashing through my mind of my parents, grandparents and mine mixed. I see in my mind the smiles, I know some of the pain inflicted by those smiles and see their deception.
This stimulates the mind to go to the place of memories and faces that represent our heritage.
I liked this and have read it more than once not because it was hard to read, but because it is rich in insight.
Thank you for sharing this and please keep writing.
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Summary: You have used few words to describe very powerful feelings and meaning. You have expressed a deep gratitude and love for your grandaughter,the Blessing you hold. Thank you for sharing this heart felt and moving poem. The things we take for granted sometimes are the biggest blessings we have. Please keep writing because it is evident it comes straight from your heart!
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What I liked most/least: The entire writing is a blessing, but the part of we have the Saviors love in good times and in bad times especially touched me. The most touching as you stated, we have His love and faithfulness when we are in doubt.
Summary: Thank you for sharing these words of truth. They speak of a faith in all areas of ones life. This is something everyone can relate to because it shows His love throughout our life from beginning to the end as we see it here. I appreciate your words and please keep writing.
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What I liked most/least: This certainly held my interest from the beginning to the end.
Summary: The feelings I had while reading this was one of the bittersweet love this person had for his wife of so many years. Though they had been married forty years the love he expressed was young and passionate. The ending was wonderful! I didn't know if I should laugh or cry, and actually I felt both. Thank you for sharing this and please keep writing.
Angels Mom
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