Boom,
Outstanding. To put what's in your heart to words is a hard thing to do and you've done it beautifully. The meter is a bit off, it's a little repetitive with your choice of words and the stanzas are somewhat uneven. In most cases this would lessen the effect and possibly obscure the message, I think this adds to the meaning and displays the wealth of emotion and love that you clearly have for your wife and future child. Congratulations on the piece. An outstanding effort for your second entry. Whether you write from the heart of just off the cuff, keep writing. You truly have a gift that should be shared and thank you for sharing it with the world.
Regards
Braddock
Boom,
A very nice piece. I can only assume you were looking into a piece of scenery that most could only dream of experiencing. Well written and nicely descriptive. Well done and please keep writing and I'll keep reveiwing. All the best and good luck.
Braddock
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