A really interesting poem highlighting one of mans many faults our inability to accept our own faults, a well written poem that is easy to read, and i noticed no obvious faults with the poem. I found it easy to associate myself with the poem
a very good poem which describes the aftermath of loves broken dream, i could easily empathise with author reading this piece, also i do agree that the last verse is a bit off somehow but i cannot honestly think of anyway to improve it while still keeping to the ethos of the poem , sorry, but a really good poem overall well written and easy to read
a good poem which uses very descriptive words to capture a moment in time, i could easily feel the emotion of the poem, my only slight critique is that whilst reading some lines ended leaving the reader out of breath as it is a bit difficult to decide how to read it. but it is a very good poem well written
i loved this poem, it resonated something in me that i have often tried to express and i don't know if i have as well as you have done here. the poem is easy to read it has a nice easy rhythm and is easy to follow, one slight critique in verse two line three you might want to look at it again as the rhythm and metre changes i think the word " parade does not fit here well, but you are the author so you decide. but a good poem well written keep writing alex
a deeply contraversional subject but done well, my only criticism would be the poem is not loose enough to be considered freestyle but almost too loose to be considered conventional poetry, so it was a bit difficult to read and pick up the rhythm of the poem. maybe the writer should decide where he wants his work to be
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