I really enjoyed reading this, typically my attention isn't caught by things unless they have a very constant rhyme scheme, but this definitely broke past that. Definitely deserving of a five start rating in my opinion, I especially like the first stanza, where the man is too caught up in his own personal thoughts of wealth to help someone who would be happy with some change. really powerful.
definitely a poem that should be published. It's very dark yet very relatable. Usually I prefer poems with a bit more of a rhyming scheme, just a personal preference that often sets me off from liking these kinds of poems, but this one has definitely broken past that.
I think it was pretty good, speaking from the point of view of someone else who also is a bit of a beginning author. You did have a few grammatical errors, like when you said deeps instead of depths, just little things like that. All around really good though.
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