Again a very good poem that expresses one feeling of waiting for love. just one thing, there's a space between the end of words and some exclimation points.
Very good poem. I like the last part the best. However a few things came unclear to me. You said the vine will hold on to the person, then said but a vine needs to cling to something. Just made me wonder since it is already holding the person. The other part I don't get is that you opened the window to cool, are you cooling down the room, or you? But other than that you did good. Keep writing:)
(It may be obvious answers, I have concentrating problems, so I might not have goten it)
Interesting. I felt all those words were true. Eotions, all they bring you is pain and devestation. love, no more then the spur of the moment, you say you love onetime, then next time you see them/it, your so over that. good job,:} keep up now.
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