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Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is definitely a story that makes me smile. It i a true happy ending. It was extrememly informative to read. I really did not know that all of that went into a kidney transplant since I know three people that have had one. it is a true miracle that we have this gift to give now. Everyone should sign their donor card.
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Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This piece is a wonderful expression of what true love really is and can be. You can feel the love you have for him qithin each verse and really each word. It is something that really comes up and grabs you. the poem though has a solid feel and a very clear voice that makes the images easy to see.
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Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is a great piece of writing. the flow and style of the writing work very well. The dialogue seems to be very natural and realistic. The setting of the story is very natural and very well developed. it is very well put together in general. I really cant find anything wrong with it at all
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Review of A real shin-dig  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
You just echoed really what alot of us feel at one time or another. i do see the humor in it and you are right about. We all really do need to see the humor in our problems and especially in our sorrows. Your humor is very clear and I do see it. You handled it wonderfully. You should be proud.
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Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
this is an extremely informative piece of writing. It actually helped me clarify my questions on google's capabilities. I learned a few things that I needed to actually. it was a very clear, concise and informative piece to read. with the exception of the few minor errors it's a good piece
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Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this. I think the neatest thing was where it said Saint George Patron Saint of England as the beginning letter of each line came together. it was a wonderful way to set up this poem/story, an interesting hook into the poem. it draws your eyes to it, and make you continue. you should be proud of it
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Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really do love this piece and I am not a huge fan of poetry. I especially love the image of death as a beautiful woman. I find that passage to be very true. You really brought your theme across very strongly. The fow and rhythm work very well as does the pattern that you used. I look forward to reading more.
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Review of How Many Times  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like this poem. The rhythm you used in it really added to the overall feel of it. It does rhyme well also. The only problem that I do see that is really minor is the spelling errors in a couple of places whether they were just typos or spelling errors. Otherwise this is a very strong piece
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Review of Take a Chance  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
In this poem, you clearly illustrate what we have to do to take a chance. It's the risks that we all take that makes us human. The rhythm pattern and the rhyme sceme work very well and add to the overall strength of this poem. It is a great piece of work in general that really cannot be improved on.
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Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
You are correct in the statement that you make in this piece. Pride is an entity created by the way that we are raised, but that it is that pride that does bring about any changes. Selfishness is the one thing that is key in all of this. Selfishness is destructive. It damages everything it touches
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Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this very much. It is an unusual way to say happy holidays, but you did bring up a very good point. We as a society have forgotten how to share with our fellow man. Society as a rule is extremely selfish. We work to get what we want then we are afraid to let it go. You have given me food for thought
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Review of A Mother's Love  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your imagery clearly illustrates your feelings about the tragedy of the tsunami last year. The images that you are using almost feel as if you are running from the tsunami itself. I like the way it feels as if it speeds up as the wave is coming to take you and your sons away. I felt like I needed to hold on
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Review of My Prayer  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is utter perfection. The rhythm pattern is perfect. The statement you are trying to make is crystal clear. It in general is a wonderful poem worthy of someone with a great talent. This really sound like a prayer that you would find in a church. You should be very proud
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Review of Open and True  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
You can see in this poem the true meaning of being an artist whether it be a writer or anything else. You want and need the responses of your peers and readers. The only change I might make is to smooth the rhythm of the first section a little. The first couple of lines are a little rough. Otherwise it is a very good poem
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Review of Help Please!  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
You have a very hard situation to deal with. You have a Brady Bunch like family. I commend you for realizing that you need help because that is the first step in the road to recovery. I do not where to send you for help that I wish I could give you myself. All I can really say is pray and hope that things get better
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Review of Dirty Church  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This poem illustrates either the dangerous actions of a person who cuts themselves or a suicide attempt. You can feel your fear for her as you read it. Her actions have hurt everyone around her. Your pain is very real in this poem and I truly do hope that you were able to get through to her.
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Review of Addict  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This piece makes a great statement. I think we all have questions today about our wants, needs and desires especially when it comes to sex. We all have the need but we question it as either a need or a want. You have captured the answer to that question very effectively. You should be proud
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Review of Inside my head  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This piece sounds exactly like a thirteen year old girl who has serious issues with her body. The dialogue she has with herself is very believable and lifelike. I would recommend expanding it to a longer piece. It has great potential to develop into something that could really male a statement about a teen's view of body image
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Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I really love it. You must have really been stabbed in the back when you wrote this. I think we all have experienced that feeling at one time or another. The rhythm of the poem is wonderful and the pattern that you put in with the mentioning of being stabbed in the back is exceptional. Keep up the good work
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Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
As another Everest enthusiast, I love this poem. it is truly a beautiful poem to honor Rob Hall, Scott Fischer, and all the others that died during that fateful time. Everest has always been a place that calls to me without any real understanding. I really think this piece is a work of art
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Review of My Rantings  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this piece. You really captured a way to explain to a child how Santa delivers all his gifts around the world. It is ingenius. I truly applaud you on the way you explained Santa's trip. I think we would all be happier if we could prove that Santa really existed.
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Review of My Angel  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
this is a great poem. The imagery that it provides is wonderful. You can feel the angels protecting you in the stanza with the rockets exploding around you. You can feel the pain of the person dying in your arms. The vividness of the imagery is really what makes the poem. You shouldn't change a thing.
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Review of Creepy Things  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is an extremely strong piece. The use of the dream imagery to further the story was an extremely nice touch. I also think that the statements at the beginning and the end of the story to the reader help to accentuate the amount of terror that the reader should feel. Keep up the good work
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Review of I Wish I Knew  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a accurate portrayal of a persons grief after losing someone that she loves dearly. This poem actually echoes what I felt when I lost my Father. You show that te pain that imprisons us is what sets us free. You lovingly depict that the pain we feelis the love for the person we lost. i would highly recommend this poem
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Review of Voodoo Love  Open in new Window.
Review by Christieavon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This poems how love really can be a wish and a curse. It can cure and kill everything that we feel. As humans we want to trust. We need to trust and yet we always feel that the significant other in our lives has some kind of motive
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