I really enjoyed this. I was a bit skeptical at first but the concept you've proposed is very intriguing. I would love to see this as a real game.
It's very well thought out and I believe it could have impacts in several areas of the world and have social impact in diverse populations.
It would be interesting to see and analyze the behavioral aspects of certain personalities and how they relate to the game and if it carries over to their real life.
Very well written! Write On!
Ahh the fallacy of youth to think they are indestructible. Michael should have left fire to the experts.
Nice story. The characters are believable and have just enough hubris to make the story almost a fable.
I think you could have taken it a bit further however, and had Michael experience more anguish and regret for Lucy. Maybe even have a few smoke induced hallucinations of rescuers coming to save him before the gel came down.
Very well written, great progression. I enjoyed it very much!
This poem is very relatable. Nice free verse style and vivid imagery.
There are so many more prisons than those made of walls and bars. And so many more chains than those of steel.
You are doing a wonderful job of through your work of bringing attention to these conditions.
The chains of addiction, depression, anxiety and alcohol.
Well written. Well done.
Write On!
Okay, this was just disturbing. It brings to mind the Red Queen of the Umbrella Corporation in Resident Evil.
But who or what is the Blue Fly? Is it a manifestation of an AI or is it part of the AI itself?
This is a very intriguing read on many levels.
Of course, I loved it. I have yet to try my hand at horror or suspense but when I do, I would love to have your input.
Thank you for yet another wonderful story!
Tim Burton couldn't have set this nightmare before Christmas any better than this!
Animals seem to know, don't they? You hear all those stories about cats in nursing homes who know when someone is going to die.
I love the way Snowflake used the Christmas village to get his point across and how he ultimately saved Walter's life and lost his own.
This is the perfect story for those cold winter nights when you want to remind people that fear can touch any holiday.
Excellent! I love your style. Love the way your stories can evoke so much emotion.
Never stop writing!
So, level with me. Was Sully's gramma really getting TV broadcasts from the future?
This story is rife with regret and nostalgia. It causes me to remember my own grandmother. She was a pillar in her community. God fearing Irish. And I miss her terribly.
This story has a different air about it than some of your others. It was more Outer Limits than Twilight Zone and I don't think it projected as much horror as some of your other work.
I still thoroughly enjoyed it. It hooks the reader and holds them all the way through.
Excellently written. You have a gift!
Ughhhhhh! I HATE spiders! You plucked a nerve with this one!!
I can feel Andrea's palpable fear when she first spots the monster in her shower. It was a perfect story for Halloween, which I think is what you wrote it for.
Anthology man! People will pay for these even if all you do is self publish for Amazon or some online publication.
As always, well written with an excellent sense of the macabre and the things that go bump in the night!
This was a disturbing one for me. You can feel Rich's angst about the bones in his crawlspace but it's the cats reaction that is more off putting.
How Jed stood sentry at the basement door.
This story built more in anticipation than any of your work I've read so far. The reader can practically feel the feeling of dread coming from the cat and spreading to its owner.
As always, incredibly well written and so totally enjoyable.
Stunning!
Have you thought of publishing an anthology?
--Skye
In some ways you have to wonder if Hannibal Lector suffered any culinary failures on his way to becoming what he was.
This story hits on so many levels. The taboo of eating human flesh even though we know it happens.
The suffering of Emil's guest to participate in what he possibly expected to be the rarest of experiences.
The chagrin of Emil himself for failing.
So very well written, flawlessly executed. (unlike Emil)
Saw no grammatical or spelling mistakes and as always,
enjoyed it immensely!
Thank you for writing!
I love the sentiment in this poem. It's as if you closed your eyes and saw the moment again.
And you've captured that moment so beautifully here.
Wonderful imagery and word painting. So well written! It captures the reader and draws them in.
Makes me long for the beach!
Well done! Write On!
I get the overall sense of urgency with this poem. How you yearn to be free and know that time never waits, you must go in search.
The only error I found was in the line hatred and ore. Should that word be ire? If not, I apologize, I just don't understand what you meant.
Very well written, with emotion and passion throughout.
I enjoyed it very much!
Write On!
I love, love, love this poem! It is an excellent tribute to the realm of Wonderland with all the players in attendance.
Wonderfully, beautifully done!
Write On!
I love the positivity of this piece! How the heart can be free and yet in love. that love is always possible. The imagery and overall message is one of hope. Thank you for sharing this delightful poem! It invokes thoughts of flying, strength, and sweet freedom to fall in love. Write On!
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