Great details! This poem is all about thanks in honor of service being provided. It starts out with a gift in remembrance of something with a card being sent and then the fourth line of the stanza. It ties in well with the prompt. Family focus seems to be a theme that could describe it. The poem is general for the most part. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details! It starts out describing the bank and then move to what the elves calls her and then about the elves. Ends talking about Emily in the world you will see her in. Voice is natural and smooth. I found this poem funny with its humor throughout. Structure is good and it is consistent. One scene flows nicely into the next. Characters is believable and realistic. I love Emily and the elves too. Great hook, pondering over who or where to start out first with. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Just voted and I see Dragon-verse is popular pick. Fantasy rules! Great choices and I hope you get many more votes in as well. This poll is simple and easy to follow. There are many options to choose from and all you need is your imagination to imagine what each universe would be like. I'd say perfect for your average voter. Sci-fi and Fantasy fans would love this poll especially. Anyone is welcome to vote.
Great details! There is terror happening all around in the world, yet for a moment, the speaker feels joy in the arms of his or her love one. This is that precious moment. Voice is natural and smooth. The speaker speaks their fears of the world and then a moment of joy. Characters are realistic and believable. I noticed a rhyming pattern to this poem which blended in with the reading. The prompt is followed perfectly. The moment of joy is captured in the end with it being the focus. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details! Casper the ghost is worried about the little things that makes up for him being a ghost while David brushes it aside. There is a lot that could be said simply for one single disease. Voice is natural and smooth matching the person who is speaking. It's easy to tell when it's David or when it's Casper. Characters are realistic and believable. Casper is humorous in a sense that there's no end to his worries about having a serious illness. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details! I think you've covered everything you can cover about the lesion and cancer and treatments within a few paragraphs. Hopefully insurance will cover UCLA. You need it. Three doses of radiation for the lesion might not be bad. Sounds like things are moving along smoothly. The blog post is well balanced and it doesn't sound as if anything is left out that would need more details. Voice is natural and consistent. Places are realistic. No grammar or spelling errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details! The dog's birthday party is pretty interesting. And yet the main character still needed to go to work. Upsetting the party. Both the dog and her romantic partner seemed upset about it. Yet she still needed to go to work. Italian for the birthday party is a delicious concept. I would have to try veggie style. The dog is smart. Voice is natural and flows smoothly. Characters is realistic and believable. It is true to the prompt. Looks a little fixing and it would be perfect. Good job and keep up the good work!
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Great details! The main character has a lot going on, living in the void with their family until one fateful day that separated them apart. Anti appears and warns the main character about the ink monster and the main character blasts fire in defense at the cost of weakness of rain. Then he and Anti left for queen of Monstrosia. I'd say chapter 2 would be either them heading to Monstrosia or meeting the queen. Good voice. Voice is natural and flows smoothly. Characters are realistic and believable. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details! Looks like the main character isn't going to get a pay raise after all. Instead, getting fired. A sad ending for him. Hopefully he gets a better job soon. Or risk going onto the streets due to lack of money. His wife wouldn't be supportive judging from her attitude. Voice is natural and flows smoothly. Characters are believable and realistic. The prompt is followed perfectly. No spelling or grammar errors found. This man has a long journey ahead of him to finding the perfect job. Good job and keep up the good work!
This is a nice, funny dialogue between the virus and the speaker. The speaker doesn't want anyone to notice that they've been infected by the virus and yet the virus brings up his brother's wedding. So the speaker asked what could be the bribe for it to stop talking and it replied drinking. Then the speaker preferred to do the drinking in response. Great details! Voice is natural and flows smoothly. Characters are believable and realistic. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details! An African American lady who struggles with her parents to find the perfect bride, going against a very prejudice family to get her own way. She fell in love with an interracial white/Arab man and chose to marry him despite how her parents were against it. Good voice. Voice was consistent and true to itself. Character was believable and realistic. I couldn't find any spelling or grammar errors when I went and scanned for one, I thought I saw time written as tine somewhere. It could be correct too. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details! This dragon king searched for a young woman in his kingdom to be the one for years after he lost his dragon fire and got trapped in his dragon form. They disappointed him. Finally, a group of men went out of the border and kidnapped a woman to bring to him out of desperation. She didn't react the same as the others. Instead, she cared for him. Because of this, his fire returned and she became a dragon too. They went into their human forms and spring arrived. Eternal winter ended. Voice is consistent and natural. The perspective focused on the important details. The prompt is followed. Romance is involved. Characters are believable and realistic. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
It's good forward or backward. Meant to be read forward makes sense. I love the details. It explains how some people live their lives looking backward in the past through a rear-view mirror and that's not how life is meant to be lived. Life is meant to be lived in the present. The activity goes by a line count of 8 and you are close. The prompt is followed nicely. No spelling or grammar errors found. Palindrome poem forms I'm not familiar with too much but I think you did a great job on it. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details! I can imagine this to be a cute female frog cartoon, like what the prompt asks for. Miss Froggy lives in a pond and eats flies all day long. When Autumn comes she eats more before digging a deep hole and hunkering down. Waits for Spring to come and becomes a mommy. Those tadpoles grows up to become young frogs under her care. How cute. This follows real life in a way kids would understand. I enjoyed reading this. No grammar or spelling errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details! The car appeared to go into the right hands of the first owner, Luke. He helped a woman named Tracy out of her father's house who was a drunkard. But then he started getting drunk himself and the car got abandoned over and over again until finally, one day, Tracy took over. Luke lost his license. So a happy ending for the car. It didn't end up stuck in the impound lot for long. Nice voice. Fitting for a car. The story was interesting because it was in the pov of a car. A car that loved going fast. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details! The fireworks are the center of the show and others are watching. Not pet friendly noises and light. Yet it's a sight to behold. The details of the fireworks are wonderful. The form is followed and fits the prompt. Nice repetition with the last lines of second and third stanza. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Off to space to settle on second Earth. Great details throughout the story! Captain Ryan Benjamin didn't look forward to meeting his bride. That was because his bride was his nemesis. Chosen by scientists. Yet he looked forward for his mission to set foot on the second Earth. It turned out his chosen bride had been switched with someone else. Someone who had a husband and kids. Quite a twist! Voice is natural and flows smoothly throughout the story. The prompt is followed. I see all four words bolded. Scifi is a genre, also following the prompt. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Jen sounds adventurous as she convinces Claire to go to the shipwreck. Still, even for necessities since they ran away. Great details! Good timing on revealing about the shipwreck. Either one of them could have seen the face on the wall, but I assume it to be Claire. Her adventure stops short on seeing the face. Good voice and tone. It's hard to write 100 words exact but you did it. No spelling or grammar errors found, just one capitalization mistake. Good job and keep up the good work!
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Great details! In the land of Oz creepy crawlies abound. Spiders, leeches, ants, flies, hornets, scorpions, and crab with a short description of what each of them does. Then it concludes the Dune beetle to be the best one of them all. The prompt is followed and I noticed a rhyming pattern. The voice reads smoothly and it is easy to follow. There's all sort of creepy crawlies in the land of Oz. No wonder it's famous. Just don't go on a picnic- especially near ants or ant hills. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details! The dialogue revealed that a garden had been built and hundred of fairies showed up. Later on it revealed the fairy it was for. True to the prompt for the contest. I think everything needs to be in quotations for the contest purposes, but everything fits otherwise. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
"You made a good point. ..." instead of The devil made a good point.
This must be a tough time for you to go through. Wanting to do so many things for summer and yet your mother is important. A time you left her with planned activities she had turned them all down. Great details. I believe the prompt wanted just the emotions and activities bolded and you separated those apart in red. The poem fits the prompt. Great voice. Not afraid to hide your worries and desires. It would be good to stick to town and doing things you could bring your mother to as well. Maybe she would enjoy that. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
This dark secret is being compared throughout the poem to many things. These things are so true. Great details on the comparison. Like a gaping hole, like a fungus, spongy. Then it goes on to talk about an abyss "filled with lies and deception". Powerful description words. Works very well for the poem. I think this is in free verse and no rhyme which is okay. No spelling or grammar errors found. Powerful poem and it gives me the chills thinking about what all the dark secret can do. Releasing it is the best way. Good job and keep up the good work!
Good prose. Great details are included giving me a visual of what is going on. This is also sad. Great picks for genre. The darkness flows through this piece. A wound in the chest is a gory thing. And then to heal the spot by themself. Then the speaker wants someone back. No grammar or spelling errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
First Impression: The details of the room is well thought out. I could tell it talks about the tiny room. Then it talks about writing in the tiny room. Once more, the details are well thought out. The writing comes from the speaker's imagination. A place where wings grow. Sculptural existence. Again, good details about the place. A place to dance and check messages as the room welcomes it. It is at the end of the rainbow with the speaker's pot of gold in it. Good details throughout. The room sounds like a good place to stay, where writing gets done. All the drama in the speaker's head gets out. The voice is natural and consistent throughout.
What needs your attention: No spelling or grammar errors found.
What part I liked best: The details throughout this poem. Okay that's not the poem itself. The beginning where the tiny room is being described. And then the writing portion where the writing process is being described. And then the activities that can be done in the room as well. I like it all.
Overall impression: Great job with this poem. The voice is consistent and natural telling believable details about the room. There is a lot going on all at once. Each stanza focuses on a particular aspect at a time. Good job and keep up the good work!
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First Impression: I wish I saw this site when I read Stolen by Vivian Zabel. Her mystery book was awesome to read. Anyway, the forum looks neat. I see the last post was in 2022 so there could be changes and new books to read that hasn't been mentioned here. This would be a go to to find new books to read. Reviewers just need to keep on posting their reviews of those published books. The information is still valid in the forum. The rules are clear. Write a review on this site and in other sites (off of this site) and win a prize. I like that idea. It doesn't take much, but a reward for buying and reading another author's book who is currently active on this site.
What needs your attention: No spelling and grammar errors found.
What part I liked best: There are many books to choose from to read that had been published by WDC writers- they are authors. The forum is filled with reviews of books written by WDC members who have gotten published. Though the last date of the last post is 2022, it looks as if many are still available. I didn't check. Some might be unavailable since time has passed though. As seen from the last post. Still worth checking out to see who is published.
Overall impression: Great job overall. This forum has lasted a long time with promoting successful authors. Someday when I have the space I'll buy a few myself. One at a time though. The rules are simple. A minimum of two reviews giving the username of the member who wrote it. It can't be an anthology. The focus is on those who have been published. Self-promotion is allowed here. Good job and keep up the good work!
Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
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