Truly, this poem gave me chills. It hints at what happened to you in a very strong manner, yet it doesn't say anything. As such, it is very difficult to review this poorly, because your writing reflects the pain of what happened, and moving on from it. Basically, the outcome of your poem is, "I don't hate you, judgement is in God's hands, but what you did will be with you for the rest of your life." Honestly, a powerful message for anyone wishing to overcome their past.
I really liked it for these reasons, and honestly, I wouldn't change a thing.
I think it was a pretty good poem actually, and something that makes you think. You are right of course that we all put on a facade, or a mask when we go about our daily lives because we are afraid of people seeing our true selves. One thing that I noticed was your words on the second row "What we wish we were" to me was kind of a tongue twister and difficult to read, to me at least it doesn't flow as naturally as the rest of the poem.
Good job, and keep it up!
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