Concise, vivid desciptions and believable dialogue. The noting of the time is good, it gives it an ominous feeling. I can easily imagine this being a film. There are some spelling mistakes, but nothing illegible. Well done, and I will read any additions you make to it.
A very nice poem. I can imagine it would sound much better if I could pronounce all the words properly. The rhyme was subtle and simple. I especially liked the description of the volcano making an island - 'ashes from a nether world sprout life.' Well done.
An interesting story with a fitting structure. There is some quite vivid description that reflects the essence of it all. I don't quite understand the use of the word 'birthed' where 'born' or 'borne' would be more correct, and would be interested to know the reason.
Interesting and funny. I liked the "hooter" that kept interrupting Hamish. My favourite part was “Of which I might remind you...” Squirrelman nodded, raising an eyebrow and making a tick in the air with his index finger, “...their imminence I did predict.”
I think this is well-written, -rounded, and realistic. The style reminded me of some old and good authors, especially with the Greek references. My favourite description was "...whose radius barely held the straightened legs of a man sitting against its only coconut tree". I have written a somewhat similar piece about someone's fear of the dark while on a desert island, and would appreciate if you read it.
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