Hy ! Great idea here! Beofre reading your story I was a complete stranger to Five Nights at Freddy's! But now the only thing I want to do is to play the 5 games on Steam :D
Realy thank you for giving us the opportunity to know this wonderfull horror game ;)
I have 2 story too, maybe you could ad some horror chapters in it? :)
The interactive is pretty addictive!The number of chapter allows to read during hours, I like it!
The only thing I have to say is about the characters names. I think they are way too similar, during the story I asked myself multiple times "Wait who is who??!! Is it Ember, Amber, Ellee??!.."
I know you can't change that now but i think t'es à good remark.
The idea of the interactive story is pretty good. It allows to the player of this game to take place, in a way, to the game by letting his imagination wandering.
But in my opinion, I think that the different chapters should be longer and more suspens should be added 😊
A very great story, good idea but I think it deserve To have way more chapters in it! It's not a Miranda L story but with a writer as good as her a story like this one could be very very good with more chapters, it would be cool going further in the exiting plot lines 😊
I think this is the best story on writing.com! And in my opinion, i think it would be even better if it continue on the girlfriend and/or Cherie part of the story :)
So keep doing dood work :)
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