Sadly, you're not wrong. I adore the thought of growing myself and I have also added to some of these interactive, but what is also worse is that some of these "Bigger ones" (Oh God...no pun intended.) Is they're flooded with "Choice chapters" now, SOMETIMES this is necessary as some can only leave two choices (assuming they can even get past chapter 4 due to writing.coms paywall bs but that's another story) However if you have no intention of adding to it yourself? It's just dumb.
I LOVE IT!! Seriously it's both very interesting and really sweet too. A Goddess of "Christmas" it's unique and again very interesting. I adore the sorta "Female Santa." Yet she's also kept in touch with the big man and has faeries. There's so much about this that I love!! Good job with this!!
Wow! Mood!! (Did I use that right?) Anyways seriously I've been down this road and honestly I hope you are NOT feeling this way. (Hell my own works will show you where I've been) I adore this though and can relate I like the length and the wording you use. I pray that you do not feel this way still as I see this was submitted about a year ago. Regardless, You did well with this, again I pray for the best for you.
Awwww, my heart!! That's so sad. (I mean it is labeled as Tragedy so OBVIOUSLY) but seriously the wording in this and the 'flow' all fit together really well and deepened the impact on the reader (In this case me.) I have to say this was well written and a lovely short (Also obviously sad) Story. Good job!
This is one of the rare times when I put my hand over my mouth and feel like the words I just read are written by ME and not another. While I am not a bride I know this feeling far too well. That voice which does not allow you to feel joy and drags you down to the darkest pits of your own personal hell. This is so expressive and so well done. I hope you do not actually feel this way, if so Then I pray for better. I cope with this too so I know the feelings. My heart goes out to you Dyinglove98. If I had more GP's I'd be putting an awardicon on this!
My God...this is truly, truly so, sad yet beautiful!! One of those breathless hands over the mouth loss for words...Oh God it's just...I'm at a loss for words on how good this is I only wish no one had actually lost their lives. Tragic, full of emotion, you did so well with this. 5/5 is all I can say along with how sorry I am for your loss.
Usually I frown upon script formats however I do know of Karbo and his world. Very vore based. As for the script format as I said usually I frown upon these however you did make up for it with the details which is rarely done. This is good work, so congrats on making script format interesting ^^
Misleading title to begin with and no expiation for anything, first Casper shrinks, then for no reason Taylor grows the two have sex (Sorta) for the purpose of having an orgasm. This is rather generic in the giantess community I'll skip the size difference details, it is a fantasy after all (Likely someone's personal one, far be it for me to bash it.) But they know each other for ten minutes and suddenly they're boyfriend girlfriend. Again this is likely someones personal fantasy but as a story it lacks context, setting, descriptions, it's simple which isn't bad but the enjoyment factor for me personally is REALLY LOW Also this seems like it's meant to be in second person. That's all well and good for boys but the title should say it's directed towards males as the character is male, yet at times it switches to third which defeats the purpose of the second person. Again this destroys the story in itself. While I'm not bashing it (Not trying to) I am merely saying what I feel. I know this came from somewhere else so take my words with a gain of salt.
In honesty it took me a second or two to get what you were doing here. I got it was a poem but with "I love Dolphins" said over and over it got kinda boring and made me wish to read it less and less. Now if I were you I'd put "I love Dolphins" once at the top then the bottom, stating facts, being poetic then a single repeat OR you could use synonyms "I adore Dolphins" for example and using a different way of saying "Love" each time, that would make it more interesting too. Still that last line was cute though.
If I'm reading this correctly it's either Amnesia, or a person who is aging with their memory fading. Either way you have worded this beautifully and it's very VERY impacting on my heart as I know a person who I had to bring back from Amnesia. This is beautiful!
I apologize if I am wrong about the subject, the description made it seem like the latter of the two I suggested.
Very relateable, honestly in tough times welcoming a leader of sorts, one who you KNOW you can believe in and not taking a chance at believing in is a bliss, I honestly tried it with another woman and it was amazing.
However...chance is pretty much one of life's many meanings and we decide our own fate. Don't get me wrong I understand what you're getting at. I'm also rather exhausted with this game of chance. But to be bound to your fate is to BECOME your own leader. You have the power to do it. It takes faith, being a leader is Difficult to no end, but you don't always have to lead others, just yourself, find what YOU want what YOU desire. The rest is merely crossing those bridges when you come to it.
This isn't bad but a few things could be better. It would have been nice if you had done more with the 'voice' Cause just some random voice saying "Oh tell Kim she's a goddess and she'll become a real goddess." Is a bit random. Maybe he could have seen an angel who told him this or something, just food for thought. That aside though the story was pretty much Kim being a goddess which is what you said it was in the summery, and you nailed that. Like I said this isn't bad, but there's room for improvement. Keep writing though I'm sure you'll get even better.
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