I can almost feel the pain and longing that comes from the words you have written, it is brilliantly done in a way that a lot of those who are in the same situations can identify easily with...
Your story takes on the fantasy almost every boy and man has, its greatly written, in a way that it could happen to anyone at any time. it needs a bit more details though. Like how did the main character in the story look like, how old were they and ect. Other than that, great work
When reading it I feel the pain and the humiliation the girl must have suffered and the fear that it might happen again, To me the swing represents the hold the man had on this girl and no matter what she did, it didn't loosen. Its a great piece, making you think about what you would do if it had happened to you.
Im not realy into religious things, but this poem struck me. The story behind it makes you wonder what happened and what is going to happen. The spelling is very good and the shape of the poem suits it. It also has a hidden warning behind it from what I can make out of it. A great poem
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