I like it, but I feel it could be fleshed out more, the last lines leave me hanging. "They heal and move on" but the scars leave a mark, something left with us, a reminder of a past experience, good or bad. Just a thought :)
I think you capture the mind of the situation but I think there is something missing. I feel, but I don't get that pit in my stomach. It seems like there should be more desperation. The poem almost seems like there is a sense of hopelessness in it, but it's not fully fulfilled. Overall solid though.
Interesting. I'd like to see it fleshed out more, but definitely a good piece. Keep it up.
The premise seems simple enough, although with all the apocalypse type stories, TV shows/Movies out there this one seems to have a bit of promise to it. I like the name Trace, and I'm interested to see where he's headed
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