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Review by Petro Hutar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Great story! Great title. Great ending. I really liked it. I appreciate that the story was easy to read and it got my attention the whole time. I really could imagine Alisa and the twist did really frightened me. Not because you would write it in scary way, but it just seems so real. She just shot random guy just because he was testing his camera and the Larry won't even know what happened.

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Review by Petro Hutar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
It was little bit emotional at the end as I imagined the feeling of saying good bye.

I didn't like the lack of narrator. However I see this was written for dialogue 500. But without narrator I couldn't enjoy it much. But probably if I saw actors saying those words, I would be more into it. As a dialogue, you did very good job.

I also don't have idea who is Tony.

One thing I think is great is that dialogue sounds realistic.
Another thing that is great is that I can feel the emotions.

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Review by Petro Hutar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This short story is about girl that just came from foster home. Now she meets Nate. After first being shy, to me it seems that mocking him is her way of opening herself to him. Maybe I am wrong, but I guess that next pages would reveal that to me.

Characters are well defined for such a short story. At least I can imagine them.

Dialogue is OK, believable but I don't like the text in parenthesis. I had to read it second time to understand, what do you mean by that sentence.
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Review by Petro Hutar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Nice story. I was wondering, why am I so interested in the story. It was just two people arguing. It had the conflict and the conflict was clear. I as a reader understand both of them, what they think and why they think it. The story had no plot but it was interesting, just because people love arguing. I give you 4 stars because I liked it almost from the start. It makes me curious and I can't help myself but to wonder. How would the story continue.
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Review by Petro Hutar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Interesting story.

It took 6 paragraphs to suck me in. From there on, I was interested in story. I like the settings and the fights. During the story I was wondering how are any of the protagonist gonna survive. I am curious in what happens next. Did Ivy saved him, or was that only a vision?

I liked it, but in my humble opinion of non-native speaker I find first paragraphs boring.
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Review by Petro Hutar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Interesting idea to write about dragons from dragon perspective.

I have to admit, I was afraid the whole time, that it would have sad ending where her mother force her to return the dragon. And I am glad that it has happy ending.

I liked it. I felt connected to the dragon and I could also feel love and connection between dragon and Andy. I like it was easy to read and I would read also the second chapter.
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Review by Petro Hutar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Through the quiet in the room, Jan could... - This comes right after interesting part starts in my opinion. Personaly I don't like to read (sorry for term) boring paragraph after one that just sparked my attention.

When Gadget said, you already know, I thought they were speaking abou Yuri. After reading whole story I still don't know who he meant. Was it Yuri who was behind it or someone else?

And what the hell is sniffer pod? I don't think it is bad that I don't know.

Jan nodded. The stranger pulled on... - by this time, I am very interested.

Finally! I know what sniffers are. :D

To me it doesn't seem natural that he cries.

Overall I liked it and it was very interesting. Good job in keeping attention of reader. It was easy to read, much easier than story about Prophet for profit.

Unlike the story about Tregon, in this one the hero has changed, and I like the change. I also liked a little that Tregon didn't changed in his story.
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Review by Petro Hutar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Nice one. I can't help myself but think. Was the story real or was it only her imagination while she listened to the novel. It is simply written and it kept me interested whole time. I feel little bit curious about what happened there. For me there is more than one explanation.
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Review by Petro Hutar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
"A few days later, a man on a huge grey stallion..." This is the first paragraph that got my full attention. After this, I was kept interested and my attention climaxed at the end. I think you did a good job and I maybe would read another one.

I liked the world and settings, I don't know what to think about several facts you stated but I think, with more stories it would become clear to me.

Oil refineries? Is this a world where there is used oil as a fuel or is it just oil for consuption? How does the world look like. Is it medieval or more of a world in industrial revolution?

Maybe I just didn't get it, but it is question I was asking myself during the story.

Another question is, whether the iron is more precious than gold in this world. To me it seems like it is, and it is interesting.

I don't feel moved by the story, but I liked it overall. I like the way it is written.

PS: I don't understand why some sentences on the end are italic.

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Review by Petro Hutar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Instantly, quote interested me.

After first three paragraphs, during third my attention decreased.

Fifth paragapht again interested me.

Very nice article. I dont understand the title of it. I guess it should be "does religion kill more people than cancer?"

It makes me think, and I as a critical thinker I find pleasure in reading it.

If I didnt like anything, it was the fourth paragraph, perhaps because as a non-native speaker, I didn't fully understand it.
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