I really enjoyed the layout of this poem. I do not know much about the structure of poetry, but this seems free-form. This poem is in-your-face, so to speak, about confronting (metaphorically/literally) those in your life who have possibly done you harm. At the same time, it is aloof - I needed to read this a couple times through to fully grasp (I think) your intended emotions/experience - and while I personally enjoyed the 'vagueness' of this poem, you could possibly tighten up your perspective a bit with different word choice, or maybe adding in another line or two(concise, but direct?) about what exactly you are trying to convey. Keep it up! :)
Well, this is definitely the longest review I have ever read on here! I appreciate your thoroughness, as well as your tone. I enjoyed reading through all the different people who have made a difference in your work, and I consider myself lucky to have made the cut!
I know I should be more active on here, but when I do return, it is to nice emails from people like you, Bubblegum Jones, and that means a lot. Thank you for your recognition, and for your inspiration. Hope you're having a lovely spring so far. :)
Interesting concept, to put human feelings onto maybe a coin? or something of value that is just laying in the middle of the street. I would try to stay away from repetitive words, especially in such a short poem. down/down and worth/worth.. Other than that, a fresh perspective on something rather ordinary. :)
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