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Review of The Last Snow Day  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A powerful and moving story about experiencing snow and the winter at your grandfather's place watching the snow fall and thinking back on your life and his life and the many snowy days you have experienced. Evocative story.


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Review of Falling Snow  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
nicely done poem using an extended metaphor life as a series of snow falls with each snow flake unique and as the snow falls people float through life nice use of optional rhyming pattern not required but well done indeed


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked this short and sweat poem about the snow fall and enjoying the snow before it melts away in the sunlight. I like the metaphor of sunlight burning away the snow and the lines, "bright sun melts snow with its bright rays, nothing evil can stand its way" leading to an extended metaphor of sunlight ending evil and bringing forth the truth. almost a political comment I think.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
this was fun to read and a good example of the constant frustration with customer disservice rules that seem to be so common these days. I hate dealing with Customer service except for Costco who does it right but they too have their inflexible rules. Love the way you turned it around at the end.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I took a completely different tactic focusing on playing music on an organ and finding it turning into prayer and gospel music. Your poem is quite good captures the acrostic words quite well and is a real prayer as well as a reflection of a Biblical figure. Well done expresses your CHristian faith. I am not a Christian but can appreciate heartfelt expression of faith.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
nice entry for the contest I like the refrain glistening snow in the sunshine as you talk about the snow and what it means to you.


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Review of ~Limbo  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
great sonnet about a soul dying and finding himself in Limbo waiting for judgement day. You nailed teh form I like the last stanza classic.


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for entry "Parade Time" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A heartfelt tribute to military vets past and present. Did you serve. If so, when and where? My wife served 20 years in Korea, Texas and DC. I would have mentioned World War 11, Korean War, perhaps the broader middle east and Africa.


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for entry "Of Islands" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
this is a powerful and moving poem about a man facing his inner demons and wondering how anyone could love a man like himself? lots of different possible interpretations in this poem but it captures the mood very well.


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Review of Promptly Poetry  Open in new Window.
for entry "Seeking Monday" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
a great entry for the contest. You weaved together (to use Donald Trump's phrase) many different topics trying to answer the question will you find your mojo on Monday morning. Dealing with writing block is not fun. Sometimes you need to just take a break have a cup of tea and wait for the inspiration to flow again


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Review of The Coffee Monkey  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
loved this slice of life humor. Your wife's comments is spot on. I asked my wife once after an argument if I am so bad why did you marry me?

her response was

"Temporary insanity and I am still insane."


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Rated: E | (5.0)
as a boy scout (life scout) from Berkeley, California I can relate to this. I believe in the flag and what it stands for. one nation united together. This is and should not be a partisan issue. I am a proud supporter of Harris for example, but I support the flag and what it symbolizes.


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Review of Revelation  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
a powerful and moving poem about coming to a decision about one's path in life and what it all means I like the way the poem moves me.

like these lines

here's more to life
than time standing still in a flickering photo from infancy.
Fashion new art out of time, bone and tears.
Call it morning, evening, nightmare.
Like vomit let it spew forth. Write it in blood —
that won't wash away.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
a powerful and moving poem about living with an emotionally abusive partner and finally realizing love is not enough to save the two of you

I will always remember your words and loving touch
The way you once cared so deeply for me
I always thought we’d have our rainbow one day
But sometimes love just isn’t enough


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Review of Music Notes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
nice reflection on songs and poems reflecting dreams. I can relate. Most of my writing happens when I wake up and write down my dreams from the night before. I don't dream dreams rather I dream movies filled with drama, color, music, often a political nightmare or a scifi fantasy.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
You nailed the spirit and the format for this 100 word drabble about Friday the 13th. There are many places where there are no 13th floors and in Asia there are many places where there are no 4th floors and in some regions of the world there are no 6th floors


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Review of Promptly Poetry  Open in new Window.
for entry "Pumpkin Rebel" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I share your disdain for Halloween advertisement in August. Costco and Home Depot have great Halloween advertising right now, took some photos which will no doubt make it into poems. I like the image chosen and the title rebel pumpkins


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Review of Don't @ Me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
like this bliz poem you nailed the format. I like how you use repetition through out the poem a few lines at a time building the tension to the end of the poem. I like the last few lines the best


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Review of Harmony  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
good use of anaphora repetition of the first line throughout each stanza except it breaks down in the last stanza but that is okay it works. Your first stanza uses ere .... then dreams... and last stanza has no repetition.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
great use of anaphora repetition throughout. Each stanza repeating a different word or phrase. I would have used the same word throughout but hey this works nicely too. I like the following lines the best

Pray with your eyes and then focus on Man;
Pray with your hearts for a peaceable plan.
Pray with your souls that our thinking be just –
Pray that our eyes, hearts and souls learn to trust…


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Review of Permanent  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I liked this poem's great use of amphora repeated lines that smile throughout the poem paints a picture of encountering a charismatic man with a devastating smile. I like these lines the best



Brilliant minds, with troubled thought.
Why - my visions overwhelm.
Questions abound, answers sought.
Dreams of a different realm.
Words in my brain, a battle fought.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
a great story filled with interesting characters thrown together in a strange new world where they have to find allies to stay alive I like the interplay between the characters.


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Review of ROAD OF TIME  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this poem about getting old. I loved the second stanza

Morning I wake, look in the mirror
and the image there that I see
could not be plainer or clearer
but surely cannot be me.

reminds me on one my poems the Old Man in the Mirror Must Die


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Review of rupture  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
great meta poem about the meaning of consciousness very zen-like quality to I would have written it as a chain of haiku form but this works well like the repetition of

here,
then gone,
back awhile


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Rated: E | (5.0)
great meta poem is about what it means to be a poet and to truly feel the whole range of emotions. I like the prose poem format here and the dialogue between a young poet and his mature self 20 years later


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