Hi Stifled Dreamer,
I like the thoughts on how you decided what made a true friend when she was considered a true friend "someone who could turst you, would listen in time of need."
I did find the story a little difficult to follow.
He becomes the friend "a true friend yet "well there just isn't a word for it so I will have to leave it at that." In my opinion if he is a true friend that is exactly what he is so the words after true friend confused me.
I do like how "he" is not exposed, but left to the readers imagination.
Good work, thanks for sharing.
Joinella
Hi SassyGirl,
I too understand life in darkness so I connected with your poem/story. I remember feeling low and finding the strength to rise again. I do have some words about your story that I would like to pass along. I did find it hard to read at times because of the misplaced or missing punctuation marks, words and run on sentences. Also "i" should always be capitalized as well as God. I believe if you review it and make some edits it will be a beautiful, inspirational piece of work. Thanks for sharing and may God bless you.
Keep up the good work.
Jewells
Like your poem. It made me wish it was June again, since I live in the Midwest and today did not even make temps out of the teens. But I am looking forward to that month once again. Thanks.
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