this is a really good heart warming story with a really convincing portrayal of emotions. I think you've struck just the right balance of playing on your readers emotions, it's subtle and not too in your face, but it's still enough to pull at your heart strings. Beautiful, well done :)
This is really great, especally the last 3 stanzas. Se things I wasn't sure about
1)fantasy would turned to reality,
Maybe fantasy would turn to reality, or has turned? (unless it was deliberate in which case ignor me!)
2) flowers that didn't bloomed,
Maybe flowers that didn't bloom, or never bloomed.
But that's just nit picking because it is a really god empathetic poem. Well done :)
this is brilliant!! i literally couldn't scroll down fast enough! you have a good thick plot with convincing characters and an awesome ending! loved it
this is a really lovely idea and a really good story. You've got a good developing narrative voice but the tone does get lost at some points, but that would be my only criticism. It was really good, i think i might go read it again! :)
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