A heartfelt piece, not sure if your typos was intentional or not. But it is a beautiful poem and I would even have this on a greeting card. It is comforting to read after losing a loved one. The second line kind of threw me off but it is understood. Good Job!
You did a wonderful job in this piece and I am just thankful for you sharing your piece. As far as your style of writing, that is what makes you different. I enjoy the various styles of writing, it brings such a uniqueness to the forefront. Thank you for sharing and don't stop writing in your unique way that you do, its great!
This author did a wonderful job with this piece and I like powerful words that gives it a BANG. I like the set-up as well as the use of words and the imagery use to heighten the title of this piece. Some may or may not relate to this but I really like this piece. It truly speaks volume and the truth. Keep flowing the way you do, great job!
This chapter was mellow and leading the reader into a what hope to be a romantic gestures for Ru and Myra. Although it was mellow out and slowly flowing into expecting the unexpected scene, can't help but to grasp my mind around the opinion that Ru was either highly infatuation with Myra or was madly in love with her. I can only hope that Ru state of mind does not cause him to go psycho if Myra turn out to be more or less than what she made her self out to be. Interesting story and looking forward to the completion of this story. Great Work!
Wow! I actually felt sad for Ru and how much in love he was with Myra. This chapter really plunge into what seem like a steamy romance into a role reversal in actions and emotions. From a female view, this would seem like the norm and usually is; but from a male view it seem unreal. The female would be consider sprung and the male would be consider as weak, given the reverse roles. However, I enjoy the reading and I am looking forward to reading the next chapter. Keep up the good work and keep writing!
The journal blog was quite different from what I usually read but it was interesting and fun to read. I like the entry about watching your p's and q's. The entry left space for either real life events or/and snippets for story making. I enjoy the reading and Keep up the good work.
What I got from reading this piece is a look at marriage from two different views. The first view is looking at other people marriage and then comparing it to what might be with the viewers' suppose marriage. The second view is being married and looking within to wonder if this was right or a mistake. The part about " But he bets they’ll find relief In that option known as grief", kind of reflect the part 'till death do us part' in the marriage vows.
Moreover, the poem was enjoyed and readable, thank you for sharing your piece.
Hello Author, I enjoyed reading your piece and found it quite interesting and true. I only wish that it was a little long, but good all together. Thank you for sharing!
Hello author, I enjoyed your poem and the style. I am starting to write poetry in this form as well. Isn't it amazing how the simplest words can touch the very essence of one's soul. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more off your work.
Greatly done! I enjoyed your piece, the way this piece was written, and the style. Life can be frustrating at times, but its an experience. : ) When life tries to get the best of me I do silent scream and loud ones as well. Keep on writing and Thank you for sharing.
Hi Author, this story was very interesting and it made me laugh. I was thinking wow, poor kid; great ending to the story. The ending had me wondering was he really losing it or what, but great job. I am sure that I wasn't the only one feeling that way as well. It was a good story.
Thank you author for sharing this piece! This piece represents to me a way of learning to forgive and being forgiven. Some may ask where is the love in forgiving, well we can also lead by example. Love can mend some things but the heart has to open the doors to forgiveness. Great piece and keep writing!
This poem would have explain my emotions two years ago I lost my father to cancer. We had may plans to celebrate big for his birthday (May 30th). He was hospitalize and terminally ill, after a long battle with cancer his body gave in. I felt crushed and relieved, he wasn't in pain no more. I can truly relate to this poem and thank you for sharing. Forgive me if I provide too much information, but this is what the poem reminded me of.
This poem was short and sweet, very straight forward and truthful. It was a good reading and I enjoyed this poem. The title is what the poem displayed, we are only humans that makes mistakes. This should have a sequel....lol...or a series. It is good to look within yourself and correct your own mistakes, before correcting others. Keep up the good work and don't stop writing!
I really enjoyed this piece! I must say this is truly what my household goes through with hot water. My husband and I has been in total bliss going on eighteen years as well in October. I definitely can relate to this reading. I love the description of marriage and job, its definitely a work.
LOL! Great Job!!!!!
The stated some interesting facts about happiness and is true. I enjoyed this reading and agree that happiness starts within. We tend to look for things and in others for happiness, be happy being you and everything else will fall into place. Thank you for sharing your reading and inspiring thought on Happiness.
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