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I tend to just talk to you like a person. I mainly focus on how the plot flows. If I see what you're trying to tell, I could also give advice on how to express yourself even better. I don't use a format.
Favorite Genres
Romance/love, Drama, Non-fiction.
Favorite Item Types
Short stories, poems
Public Reviews
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Review by Commonwriter17 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey CPGal1984

This poem is different. There is no 'happy' ending at all. It seems that you implied by the last sentence 'Oh if they had known' that the person this is about is physically departed from this world or that he/she has lost the ability to ever love at all. It has a double meaning and that speaks to me.
Great poem.

Greets,
Thijs
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Review by Commonwriter17 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey!

I really like this poem. It has this familiar rhyming rhythm you can easily read. Another thing I noticed is these word choices, it feels like a really old poem because of the word choices.
My favorite verse was ' Alas we were young, we had yet to grow,
It seems our lives took different paths, you know.
But true love cannot be deadened by mankind,
Only smothered, not extinguished, awaiting its time.'
The last part 'only smothered, not extinguished, awaiting its time.' somehow really gets to me.

Greets,
Thijs
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Review of Vacation Dreaming  Open in new Window.
Review by Commonwriter17 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey!
It was a short but powerful poem. It got to me when the last line hit 'fun'.
In my perspective it seems that you are picking subject that are usually just taken for granted on purpose. For example the tourist at the beach. It is such a small happening but you made it seem like a big deal in your last verse by saying 'I want to be with them today and have fun.'
I also like the way you said today, it seems to me that you're implying that today is just a bad day, nothing more and nothing less.
Keep up these kind of poems.

Greets,
Thijs
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