An interesting entry. It reminds me a bit of 28 Days/Weeks Later. Your entry plays off the modern 'Zombie' genre, where Zombies are no longer beings that are raised from the dead, but infected human beings that hunger for brains. The title made me laugh, thinking of the YGOA episode with Bones going off on a rant about Zombies. You have bit of grammar mistakes, the biggest one is your verb tense. You switch from past to present tense a lot in your entry (I did too until I caught myself and made edits.) There were other minor grammatical errors, but I can't remember where they all are. Overall, this was a good part one and look forward to reading the rest.
This entry makes me think back when I was growing up. I can really relate to this poem as it displays almost a mirror image of my childhood, and reminds me of some of my earlier work while coping with the stress. The poem is very well written, and reminds me of the style I wrote. Hope to see more come out soon, and keep your chin up; the storm can only get worse before it can get better.
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