This poem really makes you think about the ending of a life, makes you wanna go and live life to it's full extent. It was enduring and sad, but sweet all at the same time. Thank you for sharing!
Sincerely,
sjk
I thought it was a wonderful story and you almost made me believe that it had actually happen, well that is until you mentioned getting the prize money and the girl. The only problem that I had was this line right here:
“Good news, you don’t have spinal cancer.” She said in a smooth voice, “The CAT scan results were mixed u with yours. So you’re perfectly fine. ”
it probably should say something like ( "Your Cat Scan results were mixed with someone else's, so you are perfectly fine." ).
over all I thought it was a great piece so keep up the good work.
It is a very sad piece and I hope it is not a true one. It was very moving, I felt like crying, it made me feel as though I were there and could see the woman clearly. I could picture her sitting in a rocker by the window awaiting her husbands arrival, when she then sees another marine come up to her door. It's heartbreaking, but that kinda thing happens all the time. It was wonderful I hope you keep writing.
Your Friend,
SJK
AMEN to that, I don't have any false hopes about our relationship we have had to struggles. There are so much we have in common and though we argue and fight a lot, our relationship is still wonderful. I know I am young and most likely naive, but I have had enough trials to know when it's the real thing. I do agree with what you have said and I love to hear your insight, because it sounds like something my mom would say.
You are a talented photographer have you ever thought about submitting them to a newspaper or magazine for publishing? if not I think that you should give it a try.
Yours Truly,
SJK
I really like how you tell about untold sorrows of the heart, you put it out there honestly and sincerely. I don't think anything could have been added to tell it any better, because it was straight from the heart. I sincerely enjoyed it, it made me feel as though I were there I could envision it clearly. Sitting in a lonely dark room, wishing that things had turned out differently and that you could bring your son back to life, but you can't because it's not humanly possible. Thank you for sharing your story and I hope you get another chance to have your family.
Printed from https://shop.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/ladysaku
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.08 seconds at 10:41am on Nov 16, 2024 via server WEBX1.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
