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Review of Dry Puddles  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very beautifully written piece. The flow is smooth and the rhythm is perfect. I love the meaning of this piece as well. It resonates with me and I felt each word deep within. Very beautiful. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for sharing this.
Lana
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! I really enjoyed your story!

We start off with Timpor, who is traveling up to the overneath, which I think is a cool name. The little girl, Sara, happens across this beautiful plant and they meet. The back story you provided when Timpor was climbing up gave me a good grasp on what was going on and the why of his journey. I pictured everything just as you described and felt like I was there when Sara brought the giant home to meet her aunt and uncle. Of course they would be frightened, but I loved that Sara wasn't. Sometimes I think kids carry more bravery than most adults do.
I really enjoyed your story, and I really hope you continue writing it. I would love to go on this journey with Timpor and perhaps Sara as well.

Great job!

Lana


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Review of April's Tears  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, what a lovely poem. This struck a chord with me. I wanted the parents to believe, to see what their children saw. How true that we can get wrapped up in life to truly see what really matters.
All I have to say is...this is beautiful, emotional, and sincere.
I loved it!

Have a wonderful night,
Lana
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Review of Do you love me?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Falling Rain.
I stumbled upon your poem by chance, and I must say that I was pleased with what I read. You have given the reader a variety of images and with that comes a variety of emotion. Well done! I like the questions you ask after the images you present. It lets the reader question their feelings. I also like the mystery of who is asking all of this.
One can interpret this many ways. A lover, a mother, God, a friend, the list goes on and on. I think you did a great job on this poem.
I also think it is cool that you tattooed it on yourself.
Thanks for posting this and giving me the change to read a great poem.

Lana
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Brother. Stopping by your port for a good read, I stumbled on this nice and different poem.
I love this form. It is pure imagery. I think this is a cool concept and being something I have never seen before, I think original too. Who knew an ordinary walk home could be envisioned like a movie. At least it did in my head.
Great job and thanks for sharing.
Lana
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi SG! This is a great beginning. You have me wrapped up in the story and wanting to read more. Great job! Your descriptions are excellent. I felt like I was in the room with the two detectives, and I can imagine the uncomfortable atmosphere. The next part was just as good. I would of freaked out too if a stranger jumped in my car and demanded that of me. I love how you go back to the interogation room at the end.

Great story. I can't wait to read the rest.

Lana
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Review of Finding Me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow, what a powerful, profound poem. The first stanza, I feel rings true. All those things hold back many from achieving their goals and reaching success.

I am intrigued by this emotional journey in each stanza. Each one showcasing a powerful emotion or emotions.
I love your choice of words. I think they go well with the flow which is beautiful. I truly enjoyed this poem. Thank you for sharing this fine piece of work.

Lana.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is an interesting story. I was compelled to read on to the end.
I think this story is about the underlying fears this boy has about undergoing surgery. His nightmares of the monster eere really about him and his accident. Instead of blaming himself, his mind created this creature, and the imagination of a child can be tricky, even to themselves. I like the ending. For a child, this can be a horrible feeling.
Good job!
Lana
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Review by Lana Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Interesting that Jordan is gone anf she is in a new place. I feel for her. Being the new girl in a situation like this can be scary. Hoping for the best. on to the next chapter. Great job!
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Review by Lana Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! What a twist. Didn't expect that to happen. Now the surviving begins. Shocking cliffhanger ending. Well done!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Great chapter. Love the way your characters pop out. Another suspenseful ending. Well done!
Lana
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Review by Lana Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Great chapter with lots of action. Happy that Jordan is in the picture again. On to the next chapter. Well done!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
OH I am loving this! Very suspenseful and you do a good job of informing the reader of whats happening. I love the pov you have chosen too. A nineteen year old getting dolled up so she doesn't get killed is a cool idea. Makes everything more interesting. I also like how you introduce Jordan towards the end, leaving an opening for a possible romance and stirring up a curiosity to make the reader want to read more. Great job!

Do they really serve Chicago pizza in Britain?

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Rated: E | N/A (Unratable.)
This is a lovely version of an old classic. I will be teaching my children to say this every night before bed.
I love these two lines the most:

And should I live for other days,

I pray God that you will guide my ways.

How often we see guidance in our lives but forget to pray about it.
Thank you for writing this and keep up the good work!

Happy 2012 from the Wdc power reviewers group.

Lana
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Review by Lana Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Review of Waiting  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Still fighting to get the lump out of my throat. The mothers waiting next to me are asking me if I am ok. I must be making that I'm going to cry face. This was heart whrenching. I felt this way before with my grand father andd nephew. You got to me K. Excellent work. You are so good!

Lana
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Review of Pieces of Me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What's real to you is real to the reader too! Your emotion spills out on the page and I too, look around for a tissue. I have been there many times and as sad is can be, I can't wait to return. Our world of writing is in fact built with bits and pieces of our selves. If it doesn't have a piece of you, then it wouldn't feel real to us; your readers.
I relate to this and an so glad you shared with us. You rock!
Lana
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! This is a review for the Power Reviewers Challenge.

This poem is great. I don't know if you meant this as a metaphor, but I see it that way. A person held captive or trapped in a relationship. A prisoner who hates his captor. Great descriptions. I could see everything you described. I felt sorry for the bird, and the one holding it prisoner. Great Job!

Lana
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Review of Counterfeit love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an interesting and captivating poem. The words you have chosen bring a depth and flow to the story you are telling.
The words are not forced to conform to the flow or rhyme scheme.
Punctuation is used effectively.
Spelling is good.
The title is a good description of the poem.

The lines, What will you do when the butterflies are gone? When the keys to your favorite song are all wrong?, bring power and beauty to the poem.

I especially love this line: " your bliss is as divine as the lies of a lover are true." This line sets the tone for what is to come. Heartache and sorrow and hatred.

The pace of the mood is spread perfectly throughout the poem and sets off a perfect flow of emotions for the reader.

Thank you for sharing this poem. I enjoyed reading it and I hope you continue to write more poems as great as this. Great job.

Lana

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Review of The Cloud  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Wow what an imagination. I was reading so fast I had to make myself slow down. I love how you kept me in suspense the entire way.
Your description of the African sights were beautiful and vivid. I wanted to be there experiencing the Great rivers, mountains, and savannah grass lands.
I wondered what the man told the tour guide. The different language created an ominous suspense that hooked me in and kept me reading!

I did feel that it was a bit rushed, but I think this would be a great story if there was a little more detail and more of a connection with the main characters and their friends. Perhaps some dialogue between them. Maybe a shared story or a back story of how they met.
These are merely suggestions. Take what you will and discard the rest.

Overall a good suspenseful story. Thanks for writing this! I certainly enjoyed it!

Lana

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Review of Keep  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! This is beautifully written! I read this over and over again. I could not get enough. Thank you for sharing this. I am so lucky to have stumbled upon this when I clicked the random read button.
Emotionally stirring, visually stimulating, and beautiful.
Well done!
Write on! Lana

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Review by Lana Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
As a reader, I am able to feel the characters need for freedom and fear of it too. I am in the moment every step of the way. Great Job!

Form: Good. It flowed very well.
Visual: It was very descriptive and visually stimulating.
Grammar: Perfect. I found no mistakes
Overall: A great read.

I found this easy to read and enjoyed it very much!

Write on! Lana



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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is a great story. I would definitely read on. The concept is interesting and I want to see where you go with it. I am left wondering why the Land Rover is always following him, who this woman at the coffee shop and what role will she play later in the story, what will happen with his mother, and who is this unexpected visitor.

"The rain begins to ease and strident shafts of broken sunlight only serve to highlight the desolation of urban decay and abandoned slum housing around him. " This is my favorite line. I read it over and over. Your true to life descriptions kept in perfect sequence with the events as they took place. I was in the moment and that is a great thing to achieve as a writer! Good Job!
Overall: A great read that had me hooked and wanting more!

The only thing I didn't quite understand was the one hundred and eighty count thing. I assume it's a test or standard thing with the doctors he was seeing. It could be just me. But I pretty much understood the point of it.

I hope you write more.

Lana

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Review of Untitled  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi! I Have read your poem Untitled. This is my review.

The first verse grabbed me, and the rest held a tight grip.
Pulling my emotions all the way down to the last verse.
My favorite line: "Sometimes I feel as though I'm not living but only surviving"
My second favorite: "So my soul and, spirit I've begun reviving."
This poem is inspiring and emotionally moving! Well done! I have a new favorite!
Write on! Lana

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, I have read your piece, Dressing in a hurry and this is my review.

This was a laugh out loud, giggle to yourself, hilarious take on getting dressed.
A well written piece that leaves the reader chuckling and wanting more.
Thanks for writing this and please, keep on writing!


Lana

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