A cute little poem.
Very beautiful imagination and the really journey of home and life that is depicted in a few words is amazing and that touched me.
I loved the way you ended up and leaving the readers to imagine the rest and whats best for them.
Please watch out on the punctuation and Capitalising the start.
You could have brought in some rhyming words after the 3rd line onwards too to bring a flow in the writing.
Wonderful writing
Loved the intricate ways of the bees that you have narrated so detailed.
It felt so real and beautiful and giving again a reassurance that nature is so beautiful
oh wow this is such a true love and intimacy poured out from the heart
i would have appreciated if you went in a positive note to the reader as love is always there and not to love is something quite unimaginable ..just a thought ok
great going good luck to you
i am also here to improve my poetry and in general writing skills
i live in the french world and now becoming franglais ...lol
i think this platform and the community will help us learn and share and grow
thank you keep writing
please do go through my writings and provide your feedback
So true its beautiful the rains ..to sleep to the music of the rains is so exhilarating
mmm this took me back to the old childhood days playing in the rain and the glory of it
love this article...You gave the best and shortest possible desciption of the great work.
yes this book has inspired so many lives all over the world.
I love this quote of Be like a lotus leaf ...something i recently learnt about the magnanimity of the lotus plant ..the leaf is in water but it doesn't get immersed in the water ...live life with complete involvement but not attaching ourselves to our joys and our sorrows...
I think even when sorrows and joys are there in life krishna says it to take it in the same equanimity and surrender to our higher self or in the divine himself
Beautiful ...the writer tried to bring in both the melancholy and the uprising in this tough love
I would have loved to see this tough love end as a learning in life rather than give that wrong situation mood..
overall a very great attempt thank you for sharing
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