This is an odd poem and I like it! It has the feel of Seuss's poems for the more adult reader, simple form and words, yet complex layers.
Not sure if I like the form though, personal preference. I would suggest if you want to keep it in this diamond pattern that you adjust it just a bit so it is better mirrored.
Well, you made me cry. The child's picture just did me in. Your language is a bit stilted and formal for "todays" reader. I'd suggest using contractions and checking for redundant words/images.
Your voice tends to be passive, the potential for action is there - use to your advantage.
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