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Review by Leah Stone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This made me giggle. It also stuck me insufferably inside my own head- but that's just because I like to pretend there's an intense connotation to even the most idiotic of poems. If there are anymore me's out there, I hope they had more witty things to say about this. Feels like a poem to be met with wit. Fortunately for you, it's Tuesday and I'm only funny every other day of the week.
It ended cutely. However, the concept of infinite copies of oneself makes me nauseous. Takes away the novelty of being.

I hope your next one is called, "You're The Only You To Ever Be You," May help my ego after this.


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Review by Leah Stone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is so simple, yet powerful.
Your poem resonates with me. Wounds I have sewn shut just to re-open, the scars they have left behind- The ones that fester and deepen, and will be part of me for this lifetime- It took me years to just acknowledge them, to love them may take eons past what I'm given. Our scars will follow us, long past anyone we actually want with us, they will stay marked on our skin and ones not visible to the eye will make themselves known inevitably. Sometimes that's what it takes to heal. I don't know if that will ever comfort me. This may be the most glum review ever- I apologize. What I'm getting at is, plainly, you're right. And I feel the same.
I love this piece. It's honest.
Thank you for sharing.

Love and Light,
Leah.


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Review of Self Talk  Open in new Window.
Review by Leah Stone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I found this on Read & Review, and it made me smile.
I could offer you a few different compliments, but I'm sure you've already heard them- If from no one else with good taste, yourself. *Laugh*
Jokes aside, I enjoyed reading this.
A cute and witty poem.


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Review by Leah Stone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is beautifully written and impactful.

"Until all was covered in my fall,
I did not know what I had to lose,
and how it hurt to be left standing alone,
as if I were a weeping willow."

THIS! Such an incredible way to wrap this piece together.

Thank you for sharing. I truly enjoyed this poem.


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Review by Leah Stone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I spent some of my spare time reading through a few of your stories.. This one is now part of my Top Ten on WDC that actually made me chuckle. Since it's an old writing, criticism is probably futile -not that I have much- but I am here to grant you my overall thoughts.
I think it's fascinating how insecurity conducts behavior, specifically shown by your main characters "You" and Patty. Patty was clearly enticed by you, yet your immediate instinct was, "Shit, what did I do wrong?" Which makes you say all the wrong things- but so overtaken with fear of a mistake made, you don't focus on the natural reaction of the other party that needs to be seen. Patty didn't call, not because of my personal favorite reason, number two, but because she based her actions off of "your" reaction. I, so desperately, wish he took a trip to "Goofy Andy Land"; This story would've ended in tales of their reality, rather than what could be in Imagination Land. And, it would've caused a few more laughs- maybe some more second hand embarrassment too.

Now, you'll join me for indulgence in my own imagination:
The next man's number Patty asked for gave a far less constipated reaction. She called him the next morning, and they shared a flirtatious phone call that ended in him asking her on a date. He took her to a cute diner, tucked away somewhere outside of town; They only shared a piece of blueberry pie, and he talked about himself the entire night. Patty didn't mind, she even liked it. At the end of the date, he walked her to her door, and promised another one. He didn't kiss her, she didn't like that. But give the guy a break, he didn't know anything about her. A few months later, weeks after she finally got that anticlimactic kiss, the man suggests they move in together. Patty agrees, though she knows it's far too soon. Years pass and they eventually marry, but divorce five years and two children into the marriage. Patty, now alone and finding herself too old to flirt, wonders what events lead to where she is. She can't help but wonder if things would've been any different if she called the odd man from the soup kitchen and they actually hit it off.

So, if you lasted through that and made it to the end of this, you deserve a massive gold star. I had fun reading this one and thinking far too into it. I will admit, I was disappointed to not find anything newly written. I, personally, would delight in reading Jakrebs poetry. I hope you find inspiration to create more.

No pressure.


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Review of I Could Be Happy  Open in new Window.
Review by Leah Stone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I think the best writing is done in times of vulnerability- and this is exactly that.
Not only can you follow the thought process of the author/character, you can visually take in when it changes; The moment of acceptance, put into writing. It's beautiful, and full of heart. Some wounds are still healing, but there's a bittersweet happiness about it.
"I am a mess of miss-match shards of the best people I have ever met and super glued puzzle pieces of the love I have received that I did not think I deserved, and I am happy."
Easily my favorite line, perfectly presented.

I love this.


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Review by Leah Stone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is heart-wrenching; You've taken mine, and I'm sure others', feelings and turned them into something gracefully presented. I love the flow of this. The way you compare yourself to just a mere insect in this tortuous world.
"The cries of mine are like nothing
Not even a ripple on the water's surface"
What a way to say you feel you are not heard.
My only suggestion would be more commas, and semicolons. I, personally, think they make a piece more weighted. But if that's not your style, it's still a tragically beautiful piece as is. Thank you for sharing.


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Review of Loss  Open in new Window.
Review by Leah Stone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
OH MY GOODNESS! After your reviews of my work, I felt compelled to read some of yours.. Can I say, that was the best decision of 2022 thus far.

"Deeper down,
In my heart,
A door slammed,
A window closed,
I may have screamed,
My fear took over,
And traveled."

I have to say this is my favorite line presented, EVER. Yes, I will admit I'm a little dramatic- but WOW. So often writers are able to confront feelings others can't necessarily put into words, THIS is such a clear representation of how Loss feels. In any aspect- Loss of self, loss of loved ones. Grief is a heavy burden; It comes with fear, and doubt, and so many unanswered questions. It transforms you overnight, over the course of a long heavy process.

"And yet I feel it,
A ghostly presence
Of who I was
Before I became myself."

This took my breath away, and left me with a weight in my chest- and here I sit questioning how little I knew of myself before she became just the ghost of who I used to be. Art is made with the intention of making others feel.. You've done just that. This is pure, and utter, art.
Thank you for sharing this piece. I wish I could put into words how much I absolutely love it.


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