You have the knack to bring sad wings fluttering into an eager mind looking for that romantic and suave soul-ache that brings drops of dew to the eyes.
I liked your setting, it carries the bitttersweet feeling of the mountain forest, the damp of the air, and the beautiful silence that gives life a strong, melancholic taste in the foldings of the spirit.
A great work, Elemenopy, those are the words that sum up the positive side of the tale
As a balance I feel I must tell you that on the other side of this coin I found the story a little bit too long, there is a moment when the crisp 'mystery' of the plot disappears and then I felt a bit disappointed in 'guessing' the outcome. In my view, it would have giving me the chills if the final image would have reached me unexpectedly, and long before than it actually did. This is not wrong, mind you! It is only a feeling that as a reader, I had picked up through the reading of many other short stories.
You are a very good writer and it can be seen you are writing since long ago.
This sharing uncovered many interesting lanes I would like to explore on my own.
Thank you!
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