i like the fact that Hunter was an adult and afraid of the dark. Lol. But the descriptions of his day was kind of boring. my favorite part was when he called in sick and the people at his work think it's the end of the world! over all i think this book can go far!
the chapter that they go to the council place is not as gripping. i think you should maybe add more detail. but other than that, your story has me coming home and getting on the computer. not even doing my homework first. i think this story should get published. it is a great story
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