Very magical! This sounds like it could be the beginning of a great short story. I love how your imagination grabs everything. You added a lot of detail and I really enjoyed this. Thank you!
This is very very nice....I felt your pain through your words...I believe that reaching empathy from our readers is one of a writers main goals....It is one of mine anyway.....So, well done... mission accomplished
Thats pretty deep....If this is truly how you feel inside just know it does get better...Even if you see no brightness in your future it exists somewhere..I also can relate because I'm depressed 90 percent of the time, so I know how it feels to not want to live anymore.
wow!! Absoutly breath taking poetry. To whom ever you wrote this for would truly be proud. You have a magical way with words. Thank you so very much for sharing this.
I liked the darkness of this poem. I write like this sometimes as well. Most of your rhymes worked. Some of your lines werelonger than others, other than that I enjoyed your poetry.
Again, great. I love to read darker poetry as I am a writer of it myself. I'm also a cutter, so I felt this one. Very deep and very nice! You have a way with words!
Wow, I can relate. I freaking love this poem! When my Grandmother died, my Mother sobbed the words " I don't want to be here anymore." Now that I have lost my own Mother I feel the same way. The people with this feeling have their own reasons. To each, their own. Beautiful!
Looks like the player got played. I like your ryhmes they worked really well for me. I'm no expert, very far from it. I think you should space your lines so that it would be a little more easy to read. Other than that, I liked your ryhmes and subject.
Beautiful!! A dealer with a heart, didnt know they existed!! The need to feed is greater than anyone knows! You wrote this so well, with true conviction. You left nothing unsaid in my opinion. It was very easy to read, rolled right off my tongue.
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