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Review of Magic of a Spider  
Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (3.5)
I am not a fun loving fan of spiders, but I will allow some I find to continue on with their business. Others, I terminate on the spot. If they are in my house, they die. If they are outside, then it depends on what type of spider it is. Big fat Black Widows are on my “Do Not Like List”, along with the Brown Recluse.

I liked your piece. It is very nice. If I could suggest one thing, it would be to read through and give it one more edit. There might be a word or two is missing, which could cause it to not flow quite right.

Good job. I liked reading about your view on spiders and the poetry was fun.

Cheers,
Me
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Review of The Talent Pond  
Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Greetings fellow fish. When your pond opens up, allowing more members, please allow me to join.

Happy Swimming,

Neil
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Review of Doubt  
Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,

I could see the characters face, feel their emotion, understand their pain. I hope this is a long past memory, and not a current one, as that would be better in my oppinion. I really enjoyed reading this great piece.

Thanks for sharing,

Mr. Neil
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Review of Train Dreaming  
Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,

I am a fan of trains, and I enjoyed this piece. There are a couple spelling errors. They should be beautiful and splendor instead of what you have written. I found the piece easy to follow along and picture in my minds eye, which is a good thing. Keey up the good work.

Sincerely,
Mr. Neil
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Review of GOODBYE Earth  
Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,

Your story was good. I enjoyed the whole thing, and it had a poetic feel to it as well. I did notice one spelling error and five instances where two words were jammed together, missing the needed space that should be between them. It is easy to read past those small distractions and enjoy this piece. Good job.

Sincerely,
Mr. Neil
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Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Dr. Gupta,

Very nice sonnet, it is perfect. 14 lines, 10 syllables in each line.

I enjoyed this piece and really enjoy your work when I come across it. Please keep submitting poems so that I can keep enjoying them.

I must be careful in my reading, as I have found it very easy to make mistakes when writing a review
Thank you so much,
Mr. Neil
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Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dr. Gupta,

Very nice sonnet, and except for the little mistake in line two, it was perfect. 14 lines, 10 syllables in each line. I beleve you are missing the word "and" in the second line. Also, it only has 9 syllables and would benefit from the added word.

I enjoyed this piece and really enjoy your work when I come across it. Please keep submitting poems, so that I can keep enjoying them.

Mr. Neil


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Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim Chiu,
Thank you for writing this nice piece. It is sweet to read and nice to enjoy. I liked the smooth flow you create as you write, making for an easy, enjoyable time. I look forward to reading more of your work. You have done a nice job here, and I appreciate you time, effort, and feelings that you used.

Mr. Neil


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Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this piece. You have written a very nice sonnet. This is in a wonderful style, the Shakespearian sonnet. I am happy that Shakespeare modified the sonnet to fit the English language. It allows for such sweet poetry, and I believe that Distant Memories is absolutely wonderful. Thank yo for creating this very nice piece.

S&C
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Review of That Guy  
Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (3.5)
"That Guy" was nice to read, but, I was wondering if this is a final draft or if quite possibly, it's a "work in progress", with which you are still pulling out the kinks and improving the flow. I enjoyed the way you spun the picture in my mind, made me see exactly what you were creating. I felt though that some areas are still rough and that they would benefit from more attention. Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more writing from you.
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Review of Day 2 - 1.28.13  
Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Awesome! I can relate to this one. Very nicely done. I read this through and found it enjoyable, smoothly written, and relatable. I could see the game played out in my mind along with the blood red sunset. I can see how the quandary was formed in the game players mind.

Good Job!

Neil S
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Review of Devoured  
Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
The story is gripping. It had me hooked right away. I liked how you painted the story as you went along, creating the full picture in my mind without causing me to pull back. Then, as the climax to the story approaches, I find myself reading faster, wanting more. I liked your writing and would read more.

Nice job.

Thanks for sharing it with us.
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Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (3.0)
Written pretty good, but not my cup of tea. I always prefer a milder vocabulary and mental scenes, though I did read through the whole piece.

Writing is good. You can please some of the people....

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Review of be a man  
Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was short and sweet. It left me wondering... who, why...

Good job!

Neil S
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Review by Mr.Neil
Rated: E | (5.0)
I thought that I could feel the cold air and the snow, as I read this.

I thought that it was nice. Short and sweet as they say.

More of this sort of treat would be welcome.

Thank you for it.

Neil S
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