Excellent word usage, beautiful and heartfelt topic. no spelling errors. My only problem with the peace is that I felt some of the lines ran a little long without a break. A littler closer look at punctuation should fix the problem.
Otherwise, I found this piece to be outstanding. I see excellent writting skill, A beautiful heart and soul, and intelligent thought. Keep up the excellent work, I look forward to reading more.
excellently written, A strong heart felt peace. thank you for your words and vision and support of our fallen hero's. I took your advice on the poem I wrote " The Forgotten" and went back and changed that line. it was too harsh, If you would like to ge back and re-read it I would apprieciate your feed back. Thankyou again for your fine work.
Excellent poem and message, This a message for mankind as a whole. I only wished more people would get it I only noted one mistake,
line 2 needs the word "the" or some varient
otherwise the poem is perfect
WOW!!!! very powerful, And very correct, I myself was assulted at a very young age, And to this day I feel that anger and hatred. very well done And may God grant you and your daughter peace.
Wow! very powerful, I think you have done very well here even though the subject is a little disturbing, It was well written, good word usage, a little shaky an rythem. but overy all great job
welcome to the new world order! it is just a matter of time before that becomes a reality. and the sad part is so many people are either to stupid to see it comming or so caught up in their pathetic lives that they don't have the time to see it. I pitty our race
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