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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed:Guide to a Reckless World. An immediate and forceful poem written as a 'stream of consciousness' which comes over to the reader in a very powerful way.


Specifics:
Line 4 from end Make

I don't want to quibble with the wording but there are some of the statements that give advice which I would not follow. But then I am not reckless!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed:If I Gave You My Heart. Free verse description of the first tentative feelings of falling in love. So uncertain and full of doubt and questioning........'Would you love me...or leave me?'


Specifics: The rhythm is not always easy or regular for example: And we could fight our wars.

An interesting and tender poem which would be improved by polishing.

TR

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Review of The Hadrian  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed:
The Hadrian. A fable involving animals giving a lead to humans. With a nod to Beatrix Potter (Johnny Town Mouse.

Specifics:Good descriptions from the animal's perspective. There is a bit of a mix of the time line as the Hadrian is built after kilts and armor have been invented. Only a quibble.
Shortbread is usually a single word.

I enjoyed reading this very much. All the allusions to food and drink and celebrations Cheever my spirits. It could be expanded. Thanks
TR


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Review by Thinking-Reed Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
beautiful flowers for 3 special people
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed:Even if Saving You Sends Me to Hell. A poem about childhood demons but perhaps there is more. Tho there are quotation marks the other person remains mysterious. Perhaps an alter ego of the protagonist.


Specifics: quotation marks in verses 3 and 5 not closed. Or delete quotation marks line 1 of verse 4 and1 of verse 6.
Rhythm is variable. Try to get a regular rhythm, if you speak the words it becomes obvious where there are problems eg the final line.

A very good poem which can be worked on. Thanks
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed:echoes brought you back. An evocative poem reminding me of Christina Rosetti's poem Echo (tho' on re-reading that they are very different.) Both are very sad and about losing someone very dear.


Specifics:line 6 icicle jars with me, they don't stand, they hang. Are there alternatives?

Hanging there like an icicle or maybe better Standing still like a spectre.


I like this poem and with the right few changes it could be really great. Thanks

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed: CHRISTMAS MESSAGES:award winner. At first glance a simple short poem but it has depth and resonates.


Specifics:I like the choice of words. for example 'we sing and dance with mirth'

This captures the mixed messages of Christmas and was deservedly a prize winner.


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Review of Prometheus  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed:Prometheus. An uncomfortable poem that reflects the times we live in. Written three years ago it is prescient with its theme of hate and burning people to death.


Specifics:Its a quibble but I will say it anyway.decimate strictly applies to many things of which 1 in 10 is destroyed. So you can say 'the Roman Legion was decimated' but not 'the soldier was decimated'.

A provocative poem and interestingly written with the short lines centrally placed on the page. Generally the rhythm is good and strong tho' there are a few glitches.
A poem that made me think. Thanks.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed:Twisted Tales Contest. Very well presented and clearly written instructions with a closing date at the end of each month. Information about other entrants and past contests is presented.
One gets 500 GP for entering the competition and each entry receives an in-depth review. It is a well-established Contest which has been in existence for a long time. There is also a daily contest the Daily Flash Fiction Challenge for short pieces of less than 300 words. I'm impressed and have decided to enter, we'll see how I do!



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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed:Journey Through Genres: Official WDC Contest. this is an Official Competition and so will have a high profile. This particular competition does not raise my blood pressure as I don't like Thriller/suspense as a Genre. The instructions and information are presented clearly, there is however no information about the judges, nor is there information about the other entrants or the winners of previous competitions. Maybe if one entered the competition it would be available.

The bonus for this competition is the cash prizes for the winners;





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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed : A Poet Died Today: Th Maya Angelou.
She was a gracious lady whose life had sometimes been difficult and challenging. She rose to the challenge and by doing so encouraged and supported others. This poem is a fitting tribute to her memory.

She came to public notice with her book 'I know why a caged bird sings', an autobiographical account of her difficult childhood up to the age of 17. After that she came to public notice and she acted as a focus to help the disadvantaged and will be remembered for her writing and poetry.

This touching poem encapsulates a magnificent lady who will be long remembered.



TR
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Review of Sleeping Partner  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed Sleeping Partner. What an interesting read! Very succinct and one is left wondering .......... I like that.

Constructed in two halves flanking going to sleep. The second half is much more detailed and very descriptive of waking up fearful.... I think the hint's the full moon


Specifics 'breaths of sleep ' does not sound right to me. Why not 'deep sleeping breaths'

Great story, thanks
TR


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewedThe past two weeks. A very honest and direct description of an attack of depression. So very wee described it gives an example of how difficult depressive illness is to deal with, and how symptoms should be regarded as an emergency.


Specifics: A split infinitive 11 lines from the end
Great writing just keep on like that.

make up
Thank you for writing this piece. I hope you find this review helpful, it's intended to be my personal perspective which you may agree or disagree with.
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Review of One Last Time  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed: One Last Time. Almost all of us can remember the days during our childhood that we never wanted to end. Going to bed was not what we wanted to do at all.


Living and growing up in a loving secure family which tolerates a bit of individuality gives a child confidence and support. This poem is about such a family where Mum puts the child to bed and the routine is there but flexible. There is clever use of the words 'one last time' in multiple contexts to imply slightly different senses. This structure worked well and was very imaginative. Strangely there was a sadness created around this poem for there really will be a last time sometime or other.

Thank you for writing this piece. I hope you find this review helpful, it's intended to be my personal perspective which you may agree or disagree with.
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Review of Snow In Texas  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed: Snow in Texas. There has been freak weather all over recently and the snow in southern parts of Texas described here forms a part of these changes. Due to humans or not the weather certainly is changing!

The poem is written in a free verse style and is fresh and interesting

I enjoyed this poem and it gives a fresh-eyed view of the world. It conveys the magic of seeing something for the first time. Thank you.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed
A Christmas Tree's Story. In making the shape of a tree this poem emphasizes a sadness there is around bringing a tree inside.

This poem created mixed feelings for me. The joy of Christmas was blunted by the knowledge that the tree eventually will be thrown away. I can remember times when live trees in pots were used and replanted in the garden. In some gardens there were several ex Christmas trees growing that could be shown in later years to grandchildren. There were long debates as to which year a particular tree was the "Christmas" tree.
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Review of Last Lunch  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Last Lunch. A poem focused on thoughts and feelings around a meeting to discuss a relationship that has died.

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Elliptic free and rather abstract this poem creates the sense of loss that is so profound it can hardly be spoken of. The hurting is palpable and evident as the meal progresses. The sadness and.pain pour out of the page. Thank you for a powerful poem.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed/ Roxi. The introduction to a story about a Being like no other


Specifics: I enjoyed the large text, making it very easy to read.

I enjoyed reading this imaginative and descriptive writing. Will I read more? YOU bet I will
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Review of Blood and Truth  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed: Blood and Truth. A powerful short piece of writing which could be describing the fate of many of our ancestors.


Specifics Line 2 waste waist
Line 4 diminishing

This situation describes the fate not only of our ancestors, but also contemporaries. It is so tragic that the modern world finds it so difficult to resolve differences other than by force. Thanks for this piece.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed: In the end, it didn't matter. A short succinct poem that focuses on the most important things of life.
The first and last lines are the same, making a complete circle, which is a neat completion. The structure also allows the intermediate lines to be read as if each follows on from the first. A tightly constructed poem with a powerful message. Particularly relevant in these troubled times. Thank you for this poem.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is Thinking-Reed *Smile* and I have reviewed: Tidal Flow. A prose poem describing the feelings surrounding a chance encounter with someone with whom the writer had spent a lot of time when growing up. There is an air of sadness and nobody is ever named.


Specifics: I Suggest you choose a larger typeface and give plenty of space between paragraphs.

Densely presented on the page this takes an effort to read and I had to keep drawing my attention back to the page even though the content was interesting. I found the description of feelings and the evolution of the relationship gripping and really very sad. It is a beautiful description of a love that was lost.Thank you.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello *Smile* , I am Thinking-Reed an I have reviewed: A Solemn Voyage. This is a very dark story and gives insight into the feelings around depression. It should remind us that Christmas can be a very sad and difficult time for many people.


Specifics: Generally well-written. I will deal with typos later. The first thing to do is to divide this into about 5 paragraphs and space each with double spacing. This allows the individual points to be looked at one by one. Say para 1 after waking up 2 after seeing the island 3 after seeing the cave 4 the climb and entry to the cave. 5 The last section.


One can feel the emotional pain and loneliness which is very powerfully expressed. Do contact me and we can deal with the specifics. This is good writing and you could go a long way with consistent work.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello *Smile* , I am Thinking-Reed an I have reviewed:Respect. This poem is about veterans and how to honour them and it is very clearly yet simply stated how this could be achieved.

That we have the possibility of choosing how we live in this world is due to the sacrifices of veterans who are now dead. The best way of honoring their memory is to make the world a better place through our own example and behavior. Simply and clearly written.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, I am Thinking-Reed and I have reviewed 'Writer's Cramp'. A wonderful piece of free verse written from the heart telling of the frustrations of being a writer.

There is an excellent description of all the characters imagining them loafing around waiting for something to do,like actors on a set. The final lines are a heartfelt message to the poet's muse. She is a 'silly tramp' because she has the writer's cramp. A not so subtle way of placing the blame.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello *Smile* , I am Thinking-Reed an I have reviewed:Sky Watching. A wonderfully fresh poem written nearly a year ago in celebration of Nature. A year ago almost now; yet it seems just yesterday.


Specifics:
Line 6 the to read 'they'

I like the way the wind blowing the clouds is connected to the neighbour's olive trees. Also that you listen in vain for the sonic booms- as if in some way Nature had vanquished them. A wonderfully evocative gentle poem, thank you.
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