Oh, Anita this is great! I only wish I had as much freedom in Venice as you did. We were only there a short time but it was just magic. I can also connect with that wild woman of creativity. Great writing!
pinkg3ni3
What a great emotional rush I got from reading this! Good work! I could almost feel that cold weather and that other body. The one thing I could see to improve this story is working on the punctuation. Throw in a few more full stops and commas. At one stage I used to use exclamation marks constantly - it makes me whince to think. But that the whole point, try it, let it sit, reread it, change it - until you got the rhythm right. The flavour of your piece won't change, if anything it will improve.
Keep going. I'm looking out for more of your work.
Thanks for an experience I never had!
pinkg3ni3
I love this light, happy poem. you have managed to portray the joy of reconciliation. Some punctuation would improve the readability of the poem. In my opinion, punctuation is a way of making it easier for the reader to gain meaning not just a set of rules.
an enjoyable poem that tells a story.
Well done.
pinkg3ni3
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