This was a very heart-warming story. It brought tears to my eyes. I did kind of figure out what was going to happen, but I saw a news story with something similar. I really like your descriptions, I had a clear picture of everything, and it felt very natural.
I caught a tiny typo, but that's the only suggestion I have: "Let's make (a) wish"
Hahaha! You really had me going for that first paragraph, and I know what you do for a living so you did a good job with the surprise. I think you could expand this to make a good short story. You could just have the introduction and have the entomologist be kind of a jerk, but this is fun too. From an insects perspective, I'm sure guys do seem pretty demented.
Okay, my little guy is starting preschool tomorrow and now you have me crying. . Alright I'm okay now.
I love the message you are sending with this. Life gets so crazy that we forget to enjoy our kids sometimes, and I know we're all guilty of it. I'm supposed to review this, but I can't really see anything to improve on. I like how you ended with the words relish and remember.
I think I'm going to go turn off cartoons so me and Bubba can play Hi-ho Cherry-o now.
I thought this was really cute. I liked the description of the store and the comparison of the grandmother to Cinderella's fairy godmother. I really got a good feel for your characters based on their dialogue and actions.
I was wondering if maybe there was a way for you to have Andrea somehow notice the man before she asks what he's doing? Maybe you could say a movement outside caught her eye or something like that. Otherwise the transition seems a little abrupt. Kind of like how my sister talks, you know what I mean
Well done on a fun little story.
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. Alright I'm okay now.