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*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about the toll of fair weathered friends.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I thought the ending was spot on and brought the poem full circle. What's good for the goose is good for the gander.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This poem as 3 stanzas with 4 lines and and an AABB CCDD EEFF rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "But comes the rain, storms or showers, Not one stands with us, in our loneliest hour" I like the metaphor here, as we known rain and showers are a bit of depressing time (just about everyone can relate to a rain storm) and we feel much the same way when our "friends" aren't there for us when we need one.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader and keeps them reading. The title is an apt description of the poem. The poet uses a good economy of words to communicate complicated feelings. Well done!

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*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about observing one's significant other and assessing their mood.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I thought this was a very insightful poem.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem with the first two lines of each stanza rythming.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I know you by the glare, Today's a day, beware" There's a lot in this description. There's a glare and a facial expression can say a thousand words. In this short, succinct sentence, the poet packs a lot - there's an unhappy look, a moody expression, be weary of approach. Nice blend with the visual sense and emotional outlook.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader with it's sing song rythme, and keeps them reading. The title announces what to expect and I picked this poem because I wanted to see where it would lead me as a reader. A reflective poem with the hint of a whimsical voice that dares the reader to go deeper.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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THE POLL

*Reading* A topical poll about the White House Easter egg message for 2025.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

There's a snarky blend of comedy and seriousness to the poll that really makes the poll taker mull over the options.

*Star* ENGAGING

The poll encourages engagement with it's Easter egg messages.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of options of messages, which made the poll interesting.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to spruce up the Introduction and make it engaging.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

This was a topical, political poll with a bit of snark, quirk and fun. Worth a look. There are plenty of options to choose from.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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THE POLL

*Reading* This is a poll about the academy awards and suggestions to streamline it.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Great suggestions on ways to trim the fat, so to speak. I think I said "reduce the categories," because some of them are boring.

*Star* ENGAGING

The poll is very engaging. The introduction really sets the tone/mood and puts you in a headspace to be reflective regarding your answer.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of options to choose from, including an 'other' which is always helpful to have handy incase a poll taker has a different idea from one that is mentioned.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

A very well thought out poll with great options. Well done!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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THE POLL

*Reading* The poll is asking what type of contests do WDC Community members like the best.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I thought it was a great question that offered good feedback for the poll owner and community.

*Star* ENGAGING

What makes this poll engaging is that it is relevant to WDC and the community.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of options in the answer which I liked and an option for "other" if the poll taker had a different answer.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic or a giphy in the introduction to set the tone/mood for the poll question, if doable. A well thought out question for the community. Good luck in the Best of the Rest Contest.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Reading* THE STORY

Joey meets Rainey, the guardian of an enchanted forest.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the creativity and imagination in the story.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Joey. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

I liked the description of the eggs in the beginning of the story.
"The eggs were colored, not dyed or painted like Easter eggs No, these were obviously natural pinks, greens, and azures. Over these deep pastels, the shells were covered in swirling filigree of silver and gold."

It's a very vivid visual description that intrigues the reader and piques the curiosity. How did these eggs get this way?

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day?
PLACE: rural, forest setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Joey

There's enough here to understand his motivations. Joey goes in search of why the eggs are colored so different. What he finds is mind blowing. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader and keeps them reading. The title is appropriate for the story. A very creative piece that taps into the imagination well. The ending seemed a bit abrupt, but leaves room for more stories with the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Reading* THE STORY

Monica is in foster care. Her foster parents are Dan and Reema. They hope that eventually she'll warm up to them.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

The best part was when Monica named the stuffed pug "Fluffy."

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient from Monica's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used correctly.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting with a carnival.

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Monica

There's enough here to understand her motivations. Monica is a young girl, trying to find a certain amount of comfort in the world. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier on the eyes to read here on WDC.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader as Monica is eating some peeps. A heartwarming story. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Reading* THE STORY

Jerry Polittle is assigned to sell Dr. Peeper Peeps.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the dry wit style that the story was written in.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There was no dialogue. The story is told in narration only.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I especially liked: "As he popped one into his mouth, the sugary shell cracked open, releasing a flood of carbonated soda that fizzled against his tongue. The taste was shockingly overwhelming, a cacophony of sweetness that lingered like a sour aftertaste of regret."

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban business setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Jerry

There's enough here to understand his motivations. Jerry is excited to get the campaign, and he's successful, but has regrets. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation, specially, "font tags" as they are incomplete. I found two in the story that weren't typed in right.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. The opening introduces our narrator, Jerry Polittle and goes right into his challenge. The ending was understandable. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Reading* THE STORY

Milo dares our unnamed narrator to eat a Dr. Pepper peep in front of the haunted vending machine from 1987.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

This story was so far out, so wild, I was laughing at the end and proud to say I was a "Pepperhead."

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. I would suggest an edit for dialogue tags. Use only "he said" or "she replied" in tags to identify the speaker only, if you have to. Put action in a separate sentence. Put the action first, then the dialogue.

FOR EXAMPLE, AS WRITTEN: "Double dog dare you," Milo said, holding up the squishy marshmallow creature with a smirk.

MY SUGGESTION: A slow grin grew across Milo's face as he held up the squishy marshmallow creature. "Double dog dare you."

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Narrator

There's enough here to understand his motivations. He's been double dog dared to eat a Dr. Pepper peep in front of the haunted vending machine. Pride and Peeps go hand in hand. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The story takes on a dreamlike quality once our narrator bites the peep and the vending machine turns on. There's a zig, than a zag, and our Pepperhead must defeat Grapezilla. Who will win in the end? I have to admit, I was hooked.

The opening piques the reader's curiosity and keeps them reading. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. A very entertaining story once it picked it steam. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* A word search about Easter, the Bunny, Spring, and an Egg roll!

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

What a lot of fun! The word choice brought back a lot of good memories of kids hunting for Easter eggs.

*Star* ENGAGING

The puzzle has a lot of words that set the tone/mood of the season. Well done! The puzzle, for me, was easy to moderate.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of word choices for the puzzle. Lots of hunting to be done!

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic or a giphy in the introduction to set the mood for word search, if doable. There seems to be an unavailable graphic that might need to be fixed? This puzzle really made me smile and it's perfect for this time of year!

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THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* This word search brings attention to breast cancer.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the intent of the puzzle - to bring awareness to breast cancer.

*Star* ENGAGING

The word search had a lot of words you think of when you think of breast cancer - except breast cancer. This was a very positive search with an upbeat vibe. For me, it was an easy to moderate puzzle and I found a lot of words fairly quickly.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of word choices associated with the topic. Well done.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Congratulations on being a Quill nominee in 2019. It was well earned. I liked that you put the quill nomination graphic in the opening, but I might also suggest using a graphic or giphy to augment the tone of your puzzle. A fun search that makes you pause and think about your own situation.

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THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* A dirty little word search about spring in Canada.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

It reminded me of spring in New England. Blackflies. Good and bad memories. *Laugh*

*Star* ENGAGING

This was an easy to medium word search. I thought words like "buds" and "ants" would take me a while to find, but after a moderate glance, I found them pretty quick.

*Star*VARIETY

There's a nice of variety of words related to what spring is like in the more temperate climates.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic or a giphy in the introduction to set the tone for the word search. A fun puzzle that captures the essence of the season well. I highly recommend spending some time with it.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about shopping for the holidays.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the story the poem told. It made me chuckle.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a poem with 5 line stanzas. The 2nd and 4th lines rythme in each stanza.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "What he don't know and I don't tell, won't hurt him anyway." I love this description of the narrator's justification for her admission. It's told in a playful rythming way, as maybe a careless afterthought, but it really speaks to the heart of the narrator's feelings. And sometimes, what somebody doesn't know doesn't hurt them.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader with a nice sing-song rythme and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Nice comedic beats.

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*Reading* A poll about guilt and innocence based on Blackstone's Formulation.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the background information the introduction provided. It helped to make a more informed choice.

*Star* ENGAGING

I thought of the topic of the poll was very engaging considering that crime in California is pretty high.

*Star*VARIETY

There were 3 choices when it came to the answer, which I thought was appropriate.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

A very good poll that on the face of it, seems like there's an easy choice, but when you pause to reflect, sometimes the answer isn't as easy as it appears and I had to really struggle to think of what I would select. As a 911 dispatcher, I can firmly atest to the fact that crime has skyrocketed in my state over the past 5 years and it's not going to get better anytime soon.

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THE CROSSWORD

*Reading* This is a food based crossword.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I really liked that the answers were in the introduction. It made it easier for me to pair the answers with the clues.

*Star* ENGAGING

This was an easy to moderate crossword and I enjoyed pairing the answers with the clues.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of good clues in the puzzle.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

If anything maybe a graphic or a gighy in the introduction would further set the tone/mood. Maybe someone stirring a pot? I think it really helps to put the answers to the clues in the introduction because sometimes the clues aren't as easy as you think. Very entertaining! I highly recommend this crossword for a little fun.

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THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* This is a Word Search with a Twilight theme.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

It's been a while since I watched Twilight, but all the names came back to me.

*Star* ENGAGING

This was an easy to moderate word search and I found a bunch of words right off the bat.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of choices that fit the puzzle well. I didn't think any word was out of place.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Good use of a graphic and poem to set the tone and mood of the word search. I had a lot of fun doing this puzzle.

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THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* This word search had a Game of Thrones theme.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoy Game of Thrones, so I liked this word search.

*Star* ENGAGING

The word search was easy to moderate for me. I felt like I was a dire wolf on the hunt for my next kill, ah, word.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of choices from the series to find which made it fun.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

There's a castle graphic in the Introduction which helps to set the tone/mood for the search. The search options focused on houses and names of the houses as well as animals that represent the houses. There were 15 choices and I was eager to hunt them down. A very entertaining puzzle!

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*Reading* THE STORY

The narrator, a dispatcher, keeps getting in trouble when he gives out the name of the tow truck company.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

The tow truck with a sense a of humor.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person by the narrator. Past tense is used in the story.

*Star*DIALOGUE

Narration drives the story, and dialogue is used in strategic places to make a point.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph interested me enough to keep reading. It has a good, conversational tone of voice that connects well with readers.

*Star*CHARACTERS

I really appreciated the honesty of the narrator. He came across as a credible storyteller.


*Star*FLOW & PACING

As a reader, I was right in the moment with the narrator. Well done.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. The author uses a good economy of words to tell the story. Nice, light-hearted comedic beats.

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THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* This is a word search with a spring theme, perfect for this time of year.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

This was a really fun search. There weren't a lot of words which made the words in the search stand out a little bit more. I would say this is an easy to moderate skill level.

*Star* ENGAGING

There's a nice opening graphic of flowers getting rained on which sets the mood and expectations for the word search.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a good amount of words used in the search, that capture the essence of spring.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I really enjoyed the word search. It was perfect for this time of year!

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Review of I Am Thankful For  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Reading* THE POEM
A poem as seen through a toddler's eyes.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I really enjoyed the voice of the tone. The poet caught the simplicity of life at an early age.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is poem with an AABBCCDD...etc rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice rhythm when read out loud. If anything, I might suggest using WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "'Cause veggies are gross and make my insides queasy." This honest sentiment made me laugh. Most toddlers share this feeling that veggies are gross, but I think it's the raw honesty that resonates with readers. Who has felt this way and held back from being honest because you don't want to hurt someone's feelings. Ah, conundrum when we grow up!

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader, putting them in the moment, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. I enjoyed the touch of honesty and smiles this poem brought.


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Review of Seasons  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Reading* THE POEM

A poem that takes you on a journey through the seasons through lovers' eyes.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the progression of the seasons and how love grew throughout.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is an english sonnet following the traditional ABAB CDCD EFEF GG rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to make it easer on the eyes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "In ample fields of fragrant grasses, Rainbow colors, nature's bedspread" What a rich description using a good economy of words to paint the picture. I can easily visual a field of grass with blooms, dandelions, poppies, a colorful flower array, and it sets a table of hope and anticipation.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader in with blooming flowers, and encourages them to keep to find out what happens next. The title fits the poem. Good beats and nice storytelling.

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Review of Raised for Us  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Reading* THE POEM

A poem that examines the Easter mystery.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The poem is very succinct and to the point.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku that follows the 5/7/5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "death is defeated" This really is the *Heart* of the story when it comes to Easter. It's showing a new way forward.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is reflective of the poem, giving us a hint of what to expect. The topic matter gives the haiku depth. The revenant tone of the poem comes across which is no easy feat when words and syllables are limited. A great poem for the upcoming Easter season.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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THE CROSSWORD

*Reading* A crossword about Emily Dickinson and James Joyce.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked that I could search the answers if I didn't know them. *Bigsmile*

*Star* ENGAGING

The crossword has a lot of easy questions if you know the subject matter. Still, it wasn't hard to look it up and I found I discovered stuff I didn't know.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of questions that stirred the cobwebs.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

An intriguing introduction and offers up the biggest similarity between Emily and James. An entertaining crossword that's just as entertaining as Emily & James.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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THE CROSSWORD

*Reading* A crossword about One Republic and Imagine Dragons.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

That I could use a search engine to find some of the answers! *BigSmile*

*Star* ENGAGING

I thought the crossword was very engaging and I wanted to find out the answers.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of questions, and I think if you were familiar with these groups, you'd do very well.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I like that the basic facts to the groups were linked. I think it's very helpful in finding the answers if you didn't know the music or the groups very well. A fun crossword!

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Review of Madness of March  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Reading* THE POEM

This is an acrostic poem that takes a look of all the "fun" or madness that March brings.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the poem started with a gentle reminder of the "lion/lamb" proverb.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem that used "MADNESS OF MARCH." From Websters: a composition usually in verse in which sets of letters (such as the initial or final letters of the lines) taken in order form a word or phrase or a regular sequence of letters of the alphabet

The poem had a nice flow when read outloud.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to highlight the beginning letters.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Maybe luck will be with you," This line stuck out to me and made me think of St. Patrick's Day. St. Patrick's Day is a holiday that usually leaves a smile on one's face.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening invites the reader and dares them to read on to find out why March cannot make up it's mind. The poet uses a good economy of words to conjure up preciously the magic and madness March brings. Well done. Line count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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