My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE MEMOIR/TRIBUTE
The author shares warm memories of his father.
WHAT I LIKED
I enjoyed the voice of the story. It drew me right in. I felt like I was sitting across from the author on a porch, enjoying a drink as he talked.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
THEME
For me, I picked out the theme of an honest work ethic, and it's that's a character trait which connects with people. It's something to be admired. Though there is a scene where the father sets the son up for $200 fine.
EMOTIONAL BEATS How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? Great; Good; Okay.
There were some nice, heartwarming emotional beats in the story. You got a picture of what 'Dad' was like - a hard worker with a good work ethic, who tried to take care of his students, when they needed help. He tried to be a good role model. That steadiness is something a lot of people appreciate.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening drew the reader in. The writing is candid, honest, and sincere.
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THE POEM/PROSE
The poem offered a heartfelt look at serendipity.
WHAT I LIKED
The poem highlighted a charming story of a dream that held onto, which came true. Must have been serendipity!
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem/prose with no apparent rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font. The poem was easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "In fact she haunted my dreams for eight years," What an honest statement and it's one that we can all connect with. We've all had dreams that have lingered with us and when they come to life it's very rewarding.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening intrigues the reader in and keeps them reading. The title is a nice fit for the poem/prose. A very emotional poem that leaves the reader with a heartwarming smile.
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THE POEM
The poem lulled me into a quiet calm as it shared heartfelt feelings of love.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved how the poet used a good economy of words to paint a vivid nature setting. I felt like I was settling into a warm snuggle in the middle of the woods.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use to WDC ML to increase the font. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Stars kiss the night, and wink promises on the water." I could envision myself under a night's sky, looking up the stars and feeling that feeling of wonder when you look up.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening makes the reader feel nice and cozy and keeps them reading. The title is a nice, emotional fit for the poem. I enjoyed the reverence for nature in the poem. Nice expression.
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THE PROSE/REFLECTION
A one minute story about a spider that poses an honest reflection question for the reader.
WHAT I LIKED
I like vignettes like this that invoke reflection. It's a one minute story, but will resonate throughout the day.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the first person by the narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
THEME
For me, I picked out the theme of life lesson. The most immediate appeared to be kindness, but I think there's deeper's themes as well if you choose to ponder - thinking before reacting comes to mind.
EMOTIONAL BEATS How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? Great; Good; Okay.
This is a story that we've all encountered, and yet it will resonate in the quiet moments of the day.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
Nice voice in this vignette. The writing is candid, honest, relatable and sincere. The title fits the story well. Well done.
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THE POEM
Winter is a time to rest and sleep.
WHAT I LIKED
The author uses a good economy of words to paint an immediate picture, but also leaves the reader something to ponder.
STRUCTURE
This is free form poem with 5 couplets and each couplet rythmes.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Velvet sky and satin snow, cover the earth below," It's a nice, easy description that I can imagine. I can put myself in the moment, looking out a window and contemplating what I'm seeing.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The presentation engages the reader, putting them in the moment. The title fits the poem well. Nice expression.
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THE SURVEY
This is a survey that encourages the survey taker to nominate poets for the Spotlight.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the variety in the survey questions. There are places were you can type your answers and 'radio' boxes.
ENGAGING
The introduction did a great job explaining the purpose of the survey and encouraging survey takers. I got all excited to nominate some poets.
VARIETY
There were a lot of choices in the answers.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC.
PARTING THOUGHTS
The introduction really sells the survey. The title is encouraging. If anything the introduction referred to May, so I don't know if this an active spotlight. Well thought out and presented! Good Job and good luck in the Best of the Rest Contest.
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THE SURVEY
This is a survey that encourages the survey taker to think a bit more on the spiritual side.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the questions. I thought they were thought provoking.
ENGAGING
The introduction did a great job explaining the purpose of the survey and encouraging survey takers. I also thought the survey was 'timeless' in that it was created in 2006, but is still applicable today.
VARIETY
There were a lot of choices in the answers.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS
The introduction really sells the survey. The title is encouraging. Well thought out and presented! Good Job and good luck in the Best of the Rest Contest.
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THE POEM
A poem that evokes one to consider the power of their words during this special time of year.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked how the message was presented in a non judgemental way and challenges us to consider our actions.
STRUCTURE
This is a shape poem. The author did a great job creating the shape of a snowflake.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. Nice use of color. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "fill the air with sweet flurries, caressing tired shoulders" This phrases speaks to the positive intentions of our words using visuals that stir the heart.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The presentation grabs the reader's attention and keeps them reading. The author is very succinct and to the point. The title is a great fit for the poem. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.
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THE POEM
A holiday poem that that touches on the wonder of a child's fancy of what they might find under the tree.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the nice mix of colors and emojis in the poem. I could easily picture a fragrant tree covered in decorations eagerly awaiting Christmas night.
STRUCTURE
This is a shape poem. The author did a great job creating the shape of a Christmas tree. The bulbs were strategically placed to invoke lights on a Christmas tree.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "adored with bulbs and crimson garland," It paints a heartwarming visual in the reader's mind of Christmas tree that know it's purpose.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The presentation grabs the reader's attention and keeps them reading. The author taps into anticipation well. The title is a nice fit for the poem. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.
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THE POEM
A holiday poem that imagines a visit from Santa Claus.
WHAT I LIKED
I enjoyed how the story recreated the wonder of Christmas Eve.
STRUCTURE
This is a shape poem. The author did a great job creating the shape of a Christmas tree. With shape poems, I find it's a tad more challenging to create a rythme scheme, but this poem did a good job with developing one.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Dolls and dresses and chocolate confections" It tells of the gifts that might be left behind, but implies there's more to those gifts - they were carefully selected with love.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The presentation grabs the reader's attention and keeps them reading. The author tells a story we all can relate to - the anticipation of Christmas Eve, then Christmas morning. The title is a good fit for the poem. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.
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THE POEM
A holiday poem that captures heartfelt memories.
WHAT I LIKED
This poem talks about the centerpiece of the holidays - the Christmas tree. Simple, yet poignant, it brings back nice childhood memories.
STRUCTURE
This is a shape poem. The author did a great job adding color and creating the shape of a Christmas tree.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "that fragrant balsam scent" Again, simple, yet it touches on one of the core five senses and transports the reader to another time place. The author does a great job of using the five senses.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The presentation grabs the reader's attention and keeps them reading. The author keeps the reader in the moment, yet stirs the heartstrings as it invokes memories. The title is a good fit for the poem. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.
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THE POLL
This is a poll about how polls works.
WHAT I LIKED
Great introduction. I loved the option of collecting a Trinket.
ENGAGING
The trinket sells it! haha. The introduction also explains how a poll works so if you create one, you'll understand why you see what you see.
VARIETY
There were 3 choices of answers which I thought was appropriate.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS
The introduction draws the poll taker in and piques their interest. A good poll that is a nice introduction as to what to expect when you make a poll. Good luck in the Best of Rest Contest.
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THE STORY
It's a wild Thanksgiving when family members can't manage their boundaries.
WHAT I LIKED
That's some crazy Thanksgiving. I appreciated the ending by the time I was done!
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
DIALOGUE
The dialogue accents the narration.
DESCRIPTIONS
The best: Sissy started to give chase, and her hind legs landed in the gravy and cranberry sauce." Not only can I picture the scene, but I can see everyone at the table looking mortified.
SETTING
TIME: modern day
PLACE: kitchen
This is something that was clarified for the reader.
CHARACTERS
If anything, the pets steal the show!
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. I might check the indentation for paragraph alignment.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening engages the reader. Our narrator tells a funny story with the comedic beats in all the right places. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!
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THE STORY
Hank wants to fry a turkey for Thanksgiving dinner, but Amy suspects he's not up for the task.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the characterization. Hank was an easy going guy and Amy decided not to sweat over the small stuff.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
DIALOGUE
The dialogue drives the narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately. The dialogue does a good job to conveying the characterization.
DESCRIPTIONS
The best: "Hank and Bill in a flurry of activity, flames leaping out of the fryer. Precious beer was being poured onto the now smoldering, blackened turkey." - great visual here. I can see two guys, totally flummoxed, trying to put out the fire.
SETTING
TIME: modern day
PLACE: kitchen & garage
This is something that was clarified for the reader.
CHARACTERS
Hank and Amy
Amy knows precisely what is going to happen if Hank tries to cook a turkey and she ends up being right.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening engages the reader. Amy saved thanksgiving with some creative alternatives. A warmhearted story that will make one smile. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.
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THE STORY
Someone tooted during Thanksgiving dinner.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the mystery. There's a whole host of characters who could have been culprit.
DIALOGUE
The story is told using all dialogue. It's always a challenge when using all dialogue, but I didn't have any problem figuring out who was speaking. Good job capturing each character's voice.
DESCRIPTIONS
My the best: "Over the gums, over the tongue, look out stomach here it comes." That was especially visual.
SETTING
TIME: modern day
PLACE: kitchen setting
This is something that was clarified for the reader.
CHARACTERS
Marie
Marie is the one who is most offended by the toot and makes the biggest fuss.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening engages the reader. A boisterous kitchen table for sure! Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.
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THE POEM
A poem about enjoying passion as it rains.
WHAT I LIKED
I enjoyed the dichotomy of the stormy rain storm playing out against the backdrop of heated lovers' passion.
STRUCTURE
This is free form poem with a ABCC DDEE FGHH rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a visual quality to it when read out loud.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Let’s splash in puddles pooling at our feet, forget our worries and act indiscreet." This is a very carefree verse to me, one that speaks to enjoying moment, whatever that moment is.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening line draws the reader in with an invitation to dance in the rain. It's a bit suggestive, makes one raise an eyebrow, yet the cadence is irresistible. The title fits the poem well. The poem evokes emotion well.
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THE WORD SEARCH
"My Favorite People at WDC" are a list of WDC Community members that the creator considers their "favorites."
WHAT I LIKED
I liked that that the word search was of WDC community members. I knew a some of them, but there were more for me to meet.
ENGAGING
The word search was fun to do. I would say it was a medium difficulty. I liked learning the names of other community members.
VARIETY
There were a lot of names in the word search.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS
I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set the tone for the word search, if doable. I enjoyed the creativity of the word search and appreciated the inspiration to find these members out and check out their ports.
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THE POEM
The poem spoke to a night in a lover's bed.
WHAT I LIKED
I like the concept of the heat of passionate that a cool dark night could evoke.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem. There is no set rythme scheme, though there are rythmes.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to change font and make easier to read on the website.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Sweet yet wild, a flying dove, taste of love, oh so real." This description implies a lot - a sweet love, that soars to new heights, tangible and real.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The title is a interesting choice for the poem and it conflicts with the heated tone the contents set. Nice juxtaposition.
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THE POLL
"What is a good review for YOU," seeks to find what type of review you prefer to receive.
WHAT I LIKED
This is a poll that encourages the writer to really think about what type of review they are the most receptive to.
VARIETY
The poll offers a lot of choices, from just ratings, detailed reviews, and honest critiques.
ENGAGING
The poll had a lot of responses and the top choice had 61 selections.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS
Good use of WDC ML in the introduction. The introduction set the tone and expectations for the poll. I thought the poll provided a question that offered good reflection on the topic. Well done.
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THE STORY
A man visits Edgar Allen Poe's grave with a bottle of cognac and 3 black roses. What could possibly go wrong?
WHAT I LIKED
Nice incorporation of the prompt.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
DIALOGUE
There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.
DESCRIPTIONS
There's enough to set the scenes. I especially liked: In the dark, I looked around to barely make out alabaster statues adorning the myriad graves. Some were angels, some were crosses, and some were other things." Nice, vivid descriptions. I was creeped out walking through the graveyard.
SETTING
TIME: 1850
PLACE: Poe's grave
This is something that is clarified for the reader.
CHARACTERS
Unnamed narrator
The narrator speaks with Poe's ghost only to find out death might be closer than he thought.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening engages the reader and puts them in the moment. The story followed the prompt well. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. an eerie tale that leaves goosebumps on the arms. Good luck in the contest.
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THE STORY
A man goes on a haunting journey with the ghost of Edgar Allen Poe at his gravesite.
WHAT I LIKED
Very visual and very chilling.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
DIALOGUE
There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.
DESCRIPTIONS
There's enough to set the scenes. I especially liked: "Shrieking winds encircled the cemetery, piercing the air as tress buckled at its will. Clamminess formed against my hairline descpite the frigid gusts."This description really puts me in the moment, as the narrator approaches the grave, not knowing what to expect.
SETTING
TIME: 1850
PLACE: Poe's grave
This is something that is clarified for the reader.
CHARACTERS
Unnamed narrator
The narrator wants to speak with Poe's, after all, he found inspiration in Poe's stories, but gets more than bargained for.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and make the story easy to read.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening engages the reader and puts them right there in the scene. The story followed the prompt well. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. A spooky story that leaves goosebumps on the arms. Good luck in the contest.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE STORY
A man goes on a haunting journey with the ghost of Edgar Allen Poe.
WHAT I LIKED
Very spooky indeed! Very good incorporation of the prompt.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
DIALOGUE
There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.
DESCRIPTIONS
There's enough to set the scenes. I especially liked: The road trailed off into puddles of frozen mud, slivers of cracked ice thrusting through my pants as I sank down, drawing closer to the wrought-iron graveyard gates with each treacherous step." What an incredible, vivid description using a good economy of words. It really put me in the moment.
SETTING
TIME: 1850
PLACE: Poe's grave
This is something that is clarified for the reader.
CHARACTERS
Unnamed narrator
The narrator wants to speak with Poe's ghost, but gets more than bargained for.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and make the story easy to read.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening engages the reader. The story followed the prompt well. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. A spooky story that leaves goosebumps on the arms. Good luck in the contest.
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