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Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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THE QUIZ

*Reading* This is a quiz about Shakespeare's plays.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I think if you like Shakespeare and you've read his plays, you'll really enjoy taking this quiz.

*Star* ENGAGING

The quiz offers 5 questions. Each question is unique and challenging.

*Star*VARIETY

The variety stayed focused on Shakespeare's writing, so know your stuff!

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Good use of a graphic in the title to set the tone/mood of the quiz. This is something can be expanded on and is never out of date.

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Review of Do You Know Dogs?  
Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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THE QUIZ

*Reading* This is a really interesting quiz about Dog breeds.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I think if you know a little about dogs, this quiz is challenging and still fun. I learned a little something about dog breeds taking this quiz. The creator did a great job making the questions not too hard so you didn't get frustrated.

*Star* ENGAGING

The quiz offers 10 questions. Each question is unique and challenging.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of good questions that stayed focused on the topic.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The graphic in the title helps to set a mood/tone for the quiz. If anything, I might suggest jazzing up the introduction a little bit more so as to get the quiz taker psyched. Maybe throwing up a graphic or gify of two of some the breeds mentioned in the quiz. The quiz was a good challenge and I enjoyed taking it.

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Review of Casting A Spell  
Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* A word search about containing ingredients you'd put in a halloween caldron if you were casting a spell.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the creativity and imagination of the word search. It was fun to find the words.

*Star* ENGAGING

The word search offers a lot of unique choices. It wasn't something that you see everyday. I wanted to find all the words and I didn't find the puzzle tedious or boring. It was fun and entertaining.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of ingredients!!

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set the tone for the word search, if doable. Gussy the introduction up and really sell the puzzle. I believe there's a "gify" link the WDC ML and that might be a good starting point. Overall, the challenge level was moderate, hard, or easy. Love the imagination it took to create this!

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Review of Another Nessie?  
Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Reading* THE STORY

After Mayor Writon has sent the mini subs out to investigate Bard's Town lake, he has the answer to Nessie, but the town folk might not like it.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. Nothing like a good rain shower. *Pray* *Pray*

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I especially liked: "the blob that used to be a cow just started absorbing water and bloated up until it looked like a dang sea monster." That's a heck of a visual! I can smell it from here!

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: Bard's Town lake

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Mayor Writon and the people of Bard's Town.

Mayor Writon is a take charge kind of guy. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader and makes them curious about what Writon is going to say. Sentence count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

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Review of Mr Pumpkinface  
Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Reading* THE POEM

A light spirited poem about a pumpkin who becomes a spooky face.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the story unfolded. The tone and mood is conversational and fun.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a poem with lines and the 2nd and 5th lines rythme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Gouged out his seedy innards," I loved the word choice "gouged" here. It's perfect for this time of the year.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening has a nice voice that keeps the reader reading wanting to find out what will happen to the pumpkin. The title is a nice fit for the poem. A perfect poem for the autumn season, harvest, and halloween!

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Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about the scraps of life.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

There are a lot of scraps in life. Why did we throw them away? Or what did we find when we found them?

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Grocery list, lost in the abyss, toss it away, make room for more," It's something we do often, make a grocery list and toss it when we're done. And yet the way this is worded, it's careless, like the list itself. How careless are we with our lists ? And life? The verbiage dares to find a deeper meaning.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening is very conversational and invites the reader to keep reading. The title is a bold fit for the poem. Easy to read, yet thought provoking. Well done.

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Review of Tingling Hooves  
Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Reading* THE POEM

A lighthearted poem about hOOves visit to Ireland.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the adventure hOOves went one from the the Dingle to Galway.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a poem that follows a limerick structure.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the font bigger and colorize it.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I meandered over and over through the Emerald isle, carrying little else than a smile," I loved this visual. I can easily picture a cow taking their time and drinking in what the sights have to offer. There's a lighthearted vibe and I can't wait to see that hOOves finds.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening invites the reader in and keeps them reading. The title is a good fit for the poem. I was down for the adventure with hOOves! A fun little ditty.

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Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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THE CNOTES

*Reading* This a vibrant collection of Cnotes for birthdays, anniversary, promotions and special occasions.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the beach themed cNotes. I thought they were very inspiring and uplifting. I could feel the good vibes!

*Star* ENGAGING

There's something going on with each Cnote. The graphics are colorful and appealing.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of choices for different occasions and I thought the Cnotes were very affordable!

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The opening was very appealing and liked the the film strip in the introduction. It complimented the cnotes and set a tone for what to expect. It's a great collection that weaves in fun and positivity. Well Done! I highly recommend this collection if you're looking for a Cnote.

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Review of Dear Me  
Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Reading* THE ESSAY

This is a motivational essay that sets the tone for author's goals in 2022.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. HOOves was picking herself up by the cow hooves and plowing into 2022.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is written in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* GOAL SETTING

There's an assessment of 2021, which seemed like a tough year. I think it was for all of us. The goal for 2022 was wise up and be "me". It sounds easy, but I also know it's easy to get side tracked. I got the impression that 2022 was a recovery year from 2021.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes to read.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader using a conversational voice. The ending leaves the reader on an upbeat tone and reminds us all of something important. "Ya gotta be you."

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Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about a cow and her friend in charge of the USS Enterprise as it ventures out into space.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the creativity and fun nature of the poem. It made me smile.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. The 1st/2nd and 3rd/4th lines rythme, establishing a nice rhythm.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Follow a bull to the heavens, I ask of my crew, Without William Shatner, who knows what they'll do?" This is an easy going poem with several light hearted moments. What I liked about this description is the silliness of it, can you imagine a cow in charge with all their friends? William Shatner seems like a better fit.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader by asking them to tap into their imagination and suspend what we know, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Imaginative and whimsical. A light heart read that makes the reader grin.

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Review of The Sun Waits  
Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about enjoying the sun.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

Lots of intriguing word choices here. The one that I connected with the most was "radiant," as yes, the sun is radiant, but it's so much more. It gives us radiance. The sun's influence also effects the Earth's schumann frequency with lighting strikes and CMEs.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a Fibonacci style poem. The style became popular around 2006. Typically, a Fibonacci styled poem is a six-line poem with a syllable count of 1/1/2/3/5/8. Since then, variations have emerged, including poems with more lines, ascending and descending syllable counts, and even experimental forms that expand the Fibonacci sequence.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "sun kissed spirit never feared time's waiting glance" Succinct word choices are used here to paint a vivid a picture. I love the words "sun kissed spirit" - there's a lot of personal meaning here, especially for the individual reader. For me, the sun is a blessing, shining on my spirit, reminding me of all that is good in the world.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader, and draws them in. The title is a good fit for the poem. The ending line offers juxtaposition, as the sun brings warmth, yet, reflected on water, or too much sun, and offer a burn, so it's best to mindful.


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Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Reading* THE POEM

A fond remembrance of the poet's aunt.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the story the poem told. I felt like I got to know Aunt Catherine a little bit, too.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Using her magic blanket as a shield, so the cats never saw her fear" There's a lot of implied emotion here. A person is hiding behind a blanket, masking a fear (of cats) It's like the blanket gives strength and courage and that's what make it magical.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader in leaving them wondering why she's looking in a button box, but not for a button. The title fits the poem well. There's a lot of heartfelt emotion and warmth in the poem. Well done.

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Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Reading* THE MEMOIR

A young tHiNg finds Writing.com early in the 2000's and makes friends while building community.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Great character voice. It's very conversational and draws you right in.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by tHiNg. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

For me, I picked out the theme of life on WDC and how fun it can be. ♥OctOGRE tHiNg♥ has been a busy bee here on WDC from writing, reading, product reviews, and creating merit badges.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
I could tell how much tHiNg enjoyed being a member of the community. ((((hugs))) for sharing that mott had passed away. tHiNg may be a hand, but she's very sweet and human. Thoughts and prayers are with you.


*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Great use of WDC ML to highlight your WDC memoir.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader right in. when tHiNg isn't tHiNg, hOOves is running lose on the website, sharing her cowisdoms with the community. The writing here is candid, honest, and sincere. tHiNg is such a wonderful member here on WDC. I'm glad to know her and highly recommend people check out her port!

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Review of Immediate action  
Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

It's a hot day out and the narrator has a decision to make when he finds dogs in a car.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

The ending! Luckily, the vet performed a miracle!


*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story.

*Star*DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph sets the stage for the story's vinyette.

*Star*CHARACTERS

The narrator is well intentioned but doesn't know the "rest" of the story.


*Star*FLOW & PACING

The flash fiction has a beginning, middle and end.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story. For me, I think this is an exercise in life lessons. The word count and "beat the heat" was highlighted in accordance with the contest rules. Good luck in the contest.

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Review of An Opus Tie-Dye  
Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (5.0)
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


*Reading* THE POEM

The poem was an comedic tribute to WDC's birthday.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I want to hear more about these 3 muses and what kind of trouble they cause.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a limerick. Limericks are five line poems of a single stanza with an AABBA rhyme scheme. The first, second, and fifth lines tend to have 7-10 syllables, while the third and fourth lines tend to have 5-7 syllables.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and make it easier on the eyes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Like elections, all that back-biting," Okay, it fits the rythme scheme, but it's a great description. It sums up the discord one gets from verbal tongue lashings, evoking emotions of frustrations and then just throwing it out to wind and moving on.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening invites the reader in and keeps them reading with the rythmic flow of a limerick and the comedic touch of the muses. The title is a excellent fit for the poem. I enjoyed the fun and rush of participating in the birthday fun.

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Review of The Adonis  
Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Reading* THE STORY

One way to beat the heat is to relax at an exclusive resort, drink in hand and admiring Adonis.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. Adonis does have a man after all!


*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person by an unnamed narrator. Presnt tense is used in the story. The tense is consistent.

*Star*DIALOGUE

The dialogue comes in at the ending.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph put me right in the moment at the pool with a strawberry daiquiri in hand. Well done.


*Star*CHARACTERS

What I liked about the narrator is that they embraced the fantasy and enjoyed it. And wouldn't like to lounge around a luxury resort sipping a drinking and admiring the view?


*Star*FLOW & PACING

It's spot on for a flash fiction this size with a beginning, middle and end.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier on the eyes to read.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Nice, light-hearted comedic beats. The word count was listed and "beat the heat" was highlighted in accordance with the Bard's Hall Contest rules. Good luck in the contest.

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Review of Beating the Heat  
Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: E | (4.5)
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Kevin discovers a way to beat the heat wave, but, it just might be poisonous...

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I had a good laugh when I read the ingredients to beat the heat: sodium aluminum perchlorate and airplane fuel sound like a pretty anti-beat the heat forumula.


*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story.

*Star*DIALOGUE

Dialogue drives the story. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph put me right in the moment next to Kevin at the bunson burner. Well done!


*Star*CHARACTERS

Kevin and Benny.
Benny is the real genius here, but Kevin is also pretty entertaining. There's a lot packed into the characterization considering this is a flash fiction.


*Star*FLOW & PACING

It's spot on. Good transitions. I had no problem keeping up.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font for the eyes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story. Nice comedic beat with the ingredients used to beat the heat. This is a story that doesn't take itself too seriously. The word count and "beat the heat" were highlighted in accordance with the rules. Good luck the Bard's Hall Contest!

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Review of Rainbow's Delight  
Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Reading* THE POEM

The poem an exploration of the rainbow.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The poet used a good variety of words to describe the rainbow, tapping into emotion nicely.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a diamante poem. A Diamante poem is a 7 line poem set up in a diamond shape.

Line 1: a noun/subject
Line 2: 2 adjectives describing line 1
Line 3: 3 "ing" words related to line 1
Line 4: use 2 words to describe the noun then 2 words to describe the antonym or synoym in line 7 (if there is an antonym used in line 7, the shift occurs here)
Line 5: 3 "ing" words related to line 7
Line 6: use 2 adjectives descibing line 7
Line 7: the 1st word's antonym or synonym.

While it looks easy, it may take some time to flesh out.


*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I might use WDC ML for centering to create the diamond shape of the poem.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Promising, Fulfilling, Captivating," This the part of the poem where you use action verbs, and what's nice here is that they hint at the emotions and feelings generated when you see a rainbow. The visual presentation of the rainbow is indeed captivating and you want to stare at it and really soak in the experience. The rainbow offers a promise of hope and one can find that fulfilling in the moment.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening teases the reader to keep them reading. The title is a nice fit for the poem. A nice, uplifting and inspirational poem.

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Reading* THE POEM

The poem captured the essence of WDC from writing to fun activities and community.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the rhythmic nature of the poem. It was fun to read out loud. There's a good vibe to it. I found the poem uplifting and it made me smile.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with an AABBCCDD rythme scheme. Well done.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "this writing site, the most distinctive I've found with so much to do, its the best around" Honestly, this description does a great job of capturing the essence of WDC - it's a writing site, it's very distinctive, there's a lot from writing to puzzles and it honestly, no other site can or does offer all WDC does.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader and keeps them reading. The title is a nice fit for the poem. I enjoyed the good vibes!

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Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is about light and how it can bring light to your world.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the rhythmic nature of the poem as well as the upbeat message.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is Kyrielle poem. Each stanza has 4 lines The rythme scheme is --AA, -AA- AA-- with the last line remaining the same. Well done.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Light's reflection is shining bright;Your final story will enfold" There's a lot of hope in this line. The light is shining bright especially on your life. Let the light shine bright as your life enfolds.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader in and keeps them reading. The title is a nice fit for the poem. I enjoyed the inspirational tone of the poem.

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Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


*Reading* THE POEM

The poem carries a very inspirational message centered around our gift.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

Whatever our gift is, for me, writing, it is one that that should be treasured and nurtured. The poem is a nice reminder that our gifts are what make us special.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "There's a song in our heart that must be sung," There's a lot of emotion in us and we need to let it out, let it breath, let it grow, and not be afraid to do that.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening is very positive and upbeat. The title is a nice fit for the poem. Very inspirational. Well done!

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Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


*Reading* THE POEM

The poem was about a climb to the top.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

This poem was a double whammy in that it "climbed' as an etheree did, building on syllables, but it also climbed to the top and was richly rewarded.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is and etheree poem. There are 10 lines in an etheree. As you go up in lines, you go up in syllables. For example:

Line 1 - 1 syllable
Line 2 - 2 syllable
and so on.

Line 10 will have 10 syllables.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I could see for miles," It's an easy verse - usually at the top of the hill one sees for miles, but there's also a sense accomplishment there and that's the underlying emotion that hooks a reader.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is a nice fit for the poem. The ending offers a nice pay off for the journey. Well done!

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Review of MARA MARA  
Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

The only way to beat the heat is to Make Alaska Russian Again. But what kind of heat are you talking about?

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

A quirky tale about the beating the heat Russian style. In Alaska. Of course. *Wink*


*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story.

*Star*DIALOGUE

There is no dialogue used.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph hooked me right away with the numerous way to beat the heat listed which included a spoon, a fork and some Michael Jackson. It's a good thing Sergei came along.


*Star*CHARACTERS

There's the narrator and Sergei. It's cold in Alaska and Sergei is hot. Well. Do you want to beat the heat after all?


*Star*FLOW & PACING

Very stream of consciousness here, a tad bumpy in places but nails the ending.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make easy on the eyes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Good, solid opening. The story has nice, light-hearted comedic beats. The word count and "beat the heat" were highlighted in accordance with the contest rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review of Writing.Com  
Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


*Reading* THE POEM

The poem was a nice tribute WDC and the WDC Community.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I like how the poem talked about what you can get out of WDC.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is an arcostic poem set to the word "Writing."

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Nothing is impossible show your stuff," It's an upbeat line that lets one know that there is a lot to do at WDC so take advantage of it.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening invites the reader in and keeps them reading. The title is a nice fit for the poem. Upbeat, positive, and encouraging!

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Review of Flash fiction  
for entry "The Terrible Heat" 
Review by ScaryBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

It's hot in the Sultan's Arab country to he goes to the science council looking for ways to beat the heat.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

Cloud seeding is not the smartest way to "beat the heat." I did like the Sultan. He was a very relatable character.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omniscent. Past tense is used in the story.

*Star*DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph sets up the dilemma - how is the Sultan going to beat the heat? The opening engages the reader and keeps them reading.


*Star*CHARACTERS

The Sultan is the main character and you can feel his concern for his country. Habib is the guy who mixes the chemicals. I liked his work ethic.


*Star*FLOW & PACING

The opening set up the problem, the middle set on a solution and end wasn't for everyone. Well done.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story. This story was inspired what happened earlier to "certain desert country." earlier in the year. It's a light read, but the ending should give the reader pause to think about the consequences of intentional cloud seeding. The word count was listed in the dropnote and the prompt was was highlighted in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

Glowing Steph
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