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Review of 8-bit  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good piece. Like how you worded some of the lines differently. I would like to know what gave you the idea for this though. Write on!
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Review of The Chamber  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a good poem. The wording was excelent and it flowed smoothly. I especially like your use of personification in the line "The darkness soon drowns out that dream"
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Review of Teasing to Please  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a good piece of writing. I feel it would be better if you added it into a story though. It is a good poem but it seems like it would make an excellent story. Write on
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Review of Peaceful violence  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This poem was well worded and written. I liked how you used a large vocabulary in writing this. write on
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Review of Fear  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
The poem i feel is more of a base. Something you should build on. As i'm reader i'm wondering who is "he" why is he stalking her and what is the "game you mention in the third line of the third stanza. It is a good start but build on it and add some details like what she looks like
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Review of Silent Tears  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem is overall good. I like how you made the poem flow well. The poem kept my interest throught out the whole thing. I especially loved the line

You are the one that's on my mind 24/7

You are the one that fell from my heaven

Great work hope to read more
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Review of shot in the head  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
It was a fair poem. It could use better imagery and the words didn't really flow well to me. It overall was good just needs to flow better. Write on
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Review by shadowwriter Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Overall i thought it was a good poem. The word you was used a few times too many. My favortie line was
when you run the race of life... i might not be there to match your speed

but when you fall down

to hold your hand and lead you further..i ll be there for you


I felt your wording was good and you had a solid base for this poem. Hope to read more
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Review of The List  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
the poem is overall good. I enjoyed the comparisons used in this keep writing!
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Review of A tragic accident  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The story was sad, i enjoyed though how a happy day at the beach can turn into misery with just seeing one friend and learning that your friend/love has had an accident. I especially found it sad she never got to say good bye to him. Great Story Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Overall it was a good limerick. But i feel you could've worded the last line a little better. Other than that i liked this and hope to read more work by you
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Review of Become  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
it is an interesting poem but i'd like to know what you mean by this
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Rated: E | (3.0)
This story was an overall good one although in the preview you misspelled a word instead of disiced it's deceased. But other than that one tiny thing and the fact that i'd like to know how H is it was a good story
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Review of Lost Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem i felt was well worded, But I'd like to know did she die or are the just seperated by the world? The title though i felt fits this poem extremely well.
I dont know when I saw her
dont remember when I met her
but I remember every moment I spent with her
I was confused by these lines though how does he rember the time they were together when he doesn't know when he saw or met her
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Review of A Sweet Surprise  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This story i thought was overall well written. It seems like you wrote this thinking of a pet you had in the past. I loved how you kept it on topic and not so long worded. I enjoyed the way the girl met the dog in the lily garden and named her after the flowers. I hope to read more from you
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Review of Momo's Diary  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This story
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Review of The Sound  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I thought this story to be very well written. I enjoy how you made the story flow smoothly and kept it on the same path that it started on. I do encourage next time you write a story this long though to break it into chapters. I say this so that the reader will not get bored. But other than that i really enjoy it and thought it was well written
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