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ERRORS: No errors were seen. 
WHAT I LIKED: From the beginning to the end you wrote the reality of a relationship. I liked the way you pointed out the good and bad things couples go through to make their relationship survive and the touching way the emotions were relayed. You are right about the risk of opening up, yet again stressed that you knew the other individual would not hurt you. It was a pleasure reading this beautiful poem. 
MY LIKES: Although no names were given, the description in defining the Nordic blond was very good. 
MY DISLIKES: As mentioned already, I felt too many hyphens were used.
OVERALL THOUGHTS: The plot is good and the settings described well. I enjoyed reading it. 
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical or other mistakes were noticed and I cannot think of anything to improve the short story. 
CHARACTERS AND PLOT: Paul and Bucky are described well, and the story-line superb. 
MY LIKES: The plot moves at a pace that held my interest. It was not slow moving and the prompts were used perfectly. This is definitely a winning story and deserved the ribbon. Write On! 
MY DISLIKES: No dislikes. The story is fabulous!
Sherri
SUGGESTIONS: None I feel would improve the prose. 
Sherri
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No errors were noticed and there are no suggestions to make that I feel would improve the poem. 
CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A 
ERRORS: I did not notice an error of any kind. 
What a way to be awakened. 
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SUGGESTIONS: None I feel would improve the poem. 
CHARACTERS & PLOT: The characters could use more definition. I thought the plot was good, but would have been better if more definition was applied to the settings. 
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MY THOUGHTS: Darrell and the others struck me as selfish men who cared more about monetary things than anything else. David was my favorite character because he was wiser than Betsy and the others thought. He knew all they cared about was what they would receive after he perished, yet reminded them of why he knew why they needed and/or wanted his money. Still, he also let them know how he had felt about them before he knew he was going to die. I liked the story. It was written with realism, which is always an added plus to me. 
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: Having had the pleasure of reading your work before now, it came as no surprise when no errors were spotted, and no suggestions to be made except to keep writing. 
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CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A 
WHAT I THOUGHT: The sonnet is absolutely perfect! Well written with superb form and imagery, it was easy picturing the couple. I felt empathy for the man who was a glutton for punishment, so to speak. Someone almost always gets hurt in this kind of game. 
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ERRORS: No mechanical errors were spotted. 
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The image before the entry adds to the item. The poem takes a reader for an emotional drive. The form used is perfect in this well written entry.